"I'm burning in water and drowning in flames, to prove you wrong and scare you away. I admit my defeat and I want back home, in your heart, under the rose." HIM - "Under The Rose"
Am I drowning in water?
Am I drowning in lye?
As it covers me now, am I safe?
Am I drowning in mud?
Am I drowning in blood?
Am I safe?
As I fall onto the floor.
As I die, wanting more.
You see a broken crack among the glass and you can’t bare it anymore.
As I crash onto rocks.
As I burn in the water.
How do you look at me?
Author notes
^^ yeps...I really dun know -_-
Please tell me what you think
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hey, I love how you ask the questions in this poem (sorta like the other one by you that I read). I think it would be awesome if you wrote a follow up poem about the answers, sort of life-after-the-nightmare.
Was it a quite or a song that inspired you? I liked it a lot, whatever it was. Keep it up!
~Anne
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what other poem? -_- a song didn't inspire me, I get inspired by people I know, and hate at school. The quote as on my friends ap page and I thought it was interesting.
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Short, sweet, and to the point.
Coolness!
Keep writing! -
it ended quite abruptly, but i like it
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I liked it it was really good and short, sometimes the shortest poems are the best it made a lot of scene to me, great wirte
-Des
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