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Primal Lust

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Primal Lust

I love how you, behold my face
numbing my mind, in time and space
filled with magic and blessed in grace
I am your place, I am your place

Loving my flesh against your skin
our lustful voyage will begin
the deepest feeling from within
my heart does grin, my heart does grin

Our love is vast as open skies
so many times we miss the guise
to hear the sound of love's reprise
look in my eyes, look in my eyes

Violent tempest, as in the sea
the forces bowing down to me
I come to you on bended knee
my life’s decree, my life’s decree

Enriched in trust known to be true

love that is shared by O so few
that we shall evermore pursue
how I love you, how I love you

Your love is not but just a phase
I raise my hips to meet your gaze
my luscious lips in silent praise
you fill my days, you fill my days

O primal lust that you fulfill
I give myself, that is my will
you give my life a certain thrill
from now until, from now until

Until the day that we should die
a primal lust we can’t deny
a promise not to say goodbye
we can’t deny, we can’t deny

 

 

 

Author notes

Monotetra
The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael Walker. Each stanza contains four lines in monorhyme. Each line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight syllables. What makes the monotetra so powerful as a poetic form, is that the last line contains two metrical feet, repeated. It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or as many as desired.
Stanza Structure:

Line 1: 8 syllables; A1
Line 2: 8 syllables; A2
Line 3: 8 syllables; A3
Line 4: 4 syllables, repeated; A4, A4

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  • Sweet-Sins
    October 7

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    o my gosh this is the best poem ive ever read!!! welldone
    xxx


  • Ryan79
    November 11, 2008
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    Congratulations on the gold. ANother beautiful poem. Perfect in every way.


  • echo-ink
    July 8, 2008
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    I'm off to take a shower, the wonderful cold shower of oz. hehehe loved this.

    D. xx


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 21, 2007

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    Excellent

    Glad to see gold here. I LOVE Monotetra. You did terrific with the form in such an absorbing verse. I loved this. Well done. (sure woke me up this a.m.)


  • Griswold gold member
    May 31, 2007

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    WOWOWOOO

    This is an awesome piece of work indeed. What beautiful form and using an acrostic as the first letter of each stanza is brilliant, i can see why it won Gold...Scott


    • Amera gold member
      May 31, 2007
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      Such a nice comment. Thank you very much.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Grey Mouser
    May 30, 2007

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    A beautiful way of letting someone know how much you care. The "I Love You" acrostic type start of the satnzas show the tremendous mind at work. Fulfilling the requirements of the form flawlessly and adding a great touch to it. The sensual feel and freedom that the words inspire make this pure gold. Thanks so very much for this magnificent entry into the contest.
    Be well and be blessed,
    Mouser


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    May 20, 2007

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    This was a beautiful love poem. I find it amazing that there are so many wonderful ways to capture the feelings of love within the confines of this form. Good luck in this contest.


  • Swan song gold member
    May 12, 2007

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    a very beautiful poem a little erotic but you leave enough for the reader to make up their own mind


  • blueyez
    May 3, 2007

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    This is simply beautiful. It really took my breath away. Your gift for imagery is amazing!!!! Your inspiration never ceases!

  • a poem with a heart

    a promise not to say goodbye
    we can’t deny, we can’t deny

    Amera you brought an originality of the sceanario with its eternal music of love as well and that is the beauty of a heart of a poet that is you my friend..welldone..


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 1, 2007

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    Violent tempest, as in the sea
    the forces bowing down to me
    I come to you on bended knee
    my life’s decree, my life’s decree
    WOWza, always teaching me and then some...like this form, and the emphasis....
    Continue to reach me, teach me, reach me teach me....


  • Desire gold member
    May 1, 2007

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    Wowzers!!

    Wonderful weave of words my Friend and just Brilliant on the form...as usual
    Beautifully presented and it looks stunning~
    Love that message You convey!!
    I have yet to try this form

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 1, 2007
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    Like I said, this was exceptionally nice gal, loved it a lot, a whole lot.



    dad


  • PerVirtuous
    May 1, 2007

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    Wow! I just stumbled on to this puppy. Good thing I was sitting down! (I typed u7by8uyi0jn m when my face hit the keyboard!) It has that giddyup galloping feel to it. Mmmmm. I like that. You are ever stretching the forms to say more and more. Great effort here! Three bunnies!!

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