Why did you have to
up and leave
and leave me down,
down and blue
Why did you go?
couldn't you see,
didn't you know
that you meant the world to me?
Now my heart is left in two
and it is all because,
all because of you
I wish I could have you back again
Then, at last,
I could put down my poetry's pen
Will it be never
that you come back to me?
must I be sorrowful forever?
In my heart,
you existed.
now all there is,
is a knife twisted
Its left a whole
its left its mark
on my heart, on my soul
Now I'm left in the dark
Every single day,
since you've went away
I've been left in disarray
Agonizing Agony.
since you,
my Happiness
left me
But the salt
on the wound lies
in the fact that I
am the one at true fault
Who took my Happiness?
Locked it up, threw away the key?
No one else but me.
Please tell me what you think
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Love It
You have a great talent. I enjoyed this even though it is a sad siutation. Anyone who has loved at all has had to face this. I love the twist on the last line.
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Thanks for stopping bye and reading one of my poems and commenting on it.
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oh my goodness, this poem is so good!! seems as though everyone goes through heart ache in there life... and it depends, that guy might have been a retard and not seen what he really had!!
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thank ya...
Well, it wasn't exactly a guy....but thank you for stopping by and reading my poem--and commenting. I appreciate it!
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Alsome
u did a wonderful job with this poem it was amazing and wonderful words and heart into this poem it showed all the way through just how much u cared for this person great job and amazin write u have done keep up the gorgeous work that u have done and keep the ink flowin cause your work is beautiful i mean beauitful.. loved the poem and enjoyed reading it brought tears to my eyes. Alsome Job ALsome! hope u doing okay keep ure head up things will be okay. ttyl hugs to ya. U need someone to talk to I's here and again alsome poem!
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oh.. the poem was good to..... forgot about writing that...
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i can just imagine what you and joe were saying to each other... hehe... but i didn tneed that comment to think he was wierd...
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ok dude... you are sitting right here... .. <<<<< .(there) .... k so i just left a comment on this.. but then i said to myself ( like i could say to you now) ... that comment sucked.... so i should leave another one... basically this was awesome... like my favorite... kind of sad... but freakin awesome.... (dont laugh.... im serious!!) ... i am not a dork!! ... k.. you can shut up now.. people will think that i am wierd....
basically this rocked... k.. im getting off -
well... on a poetic level.. this is one of the best youve ever written... for real ... it makes me sad tho .. keep your head up... be positive... and happy... k.. im done lecturing... beautiful poem
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wow
this is truly beautiful...amazing! I love the sincere heart ripping agonizing emotion in this, its a true masterpiece!!
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I am really too choked up to write. This was very emotional for me, and wonderfully written by you. Well done.
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wwwwwwooooooooooooowwwwwwwww, that was amazing!! My gosh thats an awsome poem! I'm sorry you feel this way. thats why i love poetry, you can get all your emotions out and stuff! It always mkes me feel better to get out all of that hurt and stuff...... Especially about some bad fiends!
Well anyway, it's a great poem!! Definetly the best i've read from you, and from anyone on a long time, well i geuss this kind of poem.... ok ya'll no i'm horrible at putting my thought into words! lol, what i'm trying to say is that the poems great! lol
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Packed with emotion
Very real emotions. . .at times strained. . .oh so sad. . .I've felt similar. . .a couple books might help a little? Want to borrow?
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wow. this was so strong and moving. i fee like crying now. but it's late, and i can't really delve into the poem as much as i'd like to. but you poured your heart out here. beautiful.
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