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Paramnesia

Half the world has gone unseen

Apethetic, in-between

Sometimes we say what we don't mean

Confined inside a mind, unclean

Partially in fanstasy,

Partially awake

The lock may not accept the key

In every move you make

Forevermore, your place will be

A perpetual ambient disarray

Both the sides will disagree

And leave you soon astray

Partially in love with it

Partially in hate

It's hard to see two worlds split

As both of them abate

Inside two rooms without a door

The walls, no one can see

They aren't separate anymore

But still they hold stolidity

Whichever one's the truth or lies

It makes no difference in my eyes

One has color, one is drained

One is blurred, the other stained

The two infect my cool, dazed heart

Too similar to tell apart

Ever since that faithful day

When paramnesia came to play

Author notes

April 30, 2007.... Paramnesia is a memory disorder in which dreams and reality are confused and mixed toghether... not many people know that this is how I feel constantly. The two worlds--- dreams and reality... they're all running toghether... and it's hard to handle sometimes.

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Option # 4

Enter absolutely anything pree written or fresh!

RULE: comment on atlest 3 of the other poems in this contest leave your authers name and the names of the poems you commented on in your authers noat box or you will be immedetly disqualified i dont want you just to throw in aney old poem and not haft to work for it at all.

Poems I commented: "untitled (until further notice)", "Chaotic Rose Nights", and "What is my fairy tale supposed to be?"
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#1 tell me what your deepest darkest secret is, it can be anything you want, but you must address it to sthe person that you are keeping this secret from.
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"Hate and lies"
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"angel"

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Comments

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    January 24
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    Thank you for your entry in our contest an excellent poem describing the condition and a confusing one it must be at that. The rhyme was excellent, but the rhythm was not as smooth.

    Please enter a poem in our remaining contests we would love to read something from you...

    Sue and Jeff


  • Lj-
    September 8, 2007

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    I like this. The confusion is clear. It's very... soft. The rhyme was a nice touch.

    Thank you for entering,
    Good luck.

  • Midnight-x-Rose gold member
    June 13, 2007
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    Well written. At first I was confused about what it was about, then the explanation helped. But I suppose it's good it doesn't make sense, as it conveys your feelings well, you know what I mean? Thanks for sharing this write with me. I always wondered what that disorder was about, as sometimes people presume it's some kind of schizophrenia. Thank you.

  • Heavenly Angel
    June 5, 2007
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    Totally awesome
    I think you express yourself quite well
    Thank you much
  • Looking
    May 15, 2007

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    great write

    the flow was excellent, the word choice was perfect. the feeling was strong and heavy and descriptive, and the message was great. the idea was really cool, and made me really think. you made it simple yet complex. descriptive yet vague. exactly what I like to read. incredible write. If I were you, I would put angel in the author notes box though, it says to in the rules.

  • pixxiepoetess silver member
    May 13, 2007
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    It must be torturous to be unable to tell the two worlds apart. You must have a lot of strength in you to be able to cope with that every day. Your rhyme in this poem is impeccable and really helps the lines flow together well. Best of luck in the contests you've entered. >pixxie<

  • panegyric ink
    May 13, 2007

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    i dealt with this growing up...

    and know exactly where you are in your life right now. your in my prayers!!! this is well written by the way and your author notes really opened my eyes further to it!!!

    Take Care,
    brian.


  • AngelDreamer
    May 12, 2007

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    this is a great poem it has so much honesty and such good theme to it, plus a nice flow good luck in the contest and thanks for entering such a great peace

  • vampireblood
    May 10, 2007

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    I liked this piece, it was well written and the poem flowed very well overall. Nicely done my dear. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
    ~~~Vampy~~~

  • XInSaNiTy-FaIrX
    May 8, 2007

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    i can hardly find the words foe this poem, it was very well written and it rhymed perfectly, and flowed perfectly. it was dripping with emotion and the way you feel, itis very powerfull and a great poem.

  • RawrrKat
    May 3, 2007
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    Usually I don't much care for poems with massive entry histories but this piece was very very well written! I love the lines

    "One has color, one is drained

    One is blurred, the other stained"

    Love that part!!

    Thank you for entering!

    ~Katie


  • YoursTrulyJulie silver member
    May 2, 2007

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    Wow, this is so good. I liked the flow and rhyme. I wish you all the best of luck in this contest

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