My telekinesis is getting the best of me again
Contorting the gray mass in my head called my brain
And it twists, curls up in the corner of my skull
Vomiting out your apparition, soft but stone cold
Your wraith floats before me, inhuman now---
Its tendrils hovering like a sleeping breast,
the way your blindingly white dress did float
in crisp waters, the night of your death.
"Speak!"
Silence.
Your grim lips pulled taut
Are they yellow like the dead?
Or blue to match your hue?
I cannot tell with disillusioned eyes.
Your vagaries lie in your silence;
I expect your wrath to come crashing down
Upon my head, spilling my blood. . .
Just as your empty soul should.
In the distance, there are the screams of banshees
But they seem tame to me, benign
The loosened grip on my sanity, falling
Like glacial blocks of ice into black oceans---
Serves to deteriorate my mind into ruins more effectively.
Consuming my vision are the rose petals
That did float around your corpse
When I smelled death and placed them there.
Author notes
Dark, Poe-like apparitions. Contest/word-bank inspired.
May 1st, 2007: There are so many similarities, here, between the movie "What Lies Beneath" and this poem.
Dec. 6th, 2008: Okay, this is also very strange because I now am familiar (and have been for the better part of this year) with the beautiful music of Nick Cave, and it is almost freakish how much of a resemblance this has to the music video for "Where the Wild Roses Grow". It is a happy coincidence, especially considering I did not know of the song's existence before this year, but it is a cool coincidence nonetheless.
Dec. 20th, 2008: Came in 12th/25 in "the darkwrite challenge rides again" (52 entries total).
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired 11 by February Moon.
300 points, ended May 1, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the DARKWRITE challenge rides again by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
600 points, ended December 20, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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excellent with one exception... blingdingly should be blindingly correct???
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did i STILL not change that?? ill do that right now. thanks!
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This is quite an amazing write. I loved the imagery here and usage of word play.
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Very nice, I really like the imagery portrayed. You capture the reader attention well. Neatly penned. Thank you for entering and good luck
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Awesome
You may want to fix the typo in this line as it throws of the beautiful flow of this wonderous and descriptive moody write :the way your blingdingly white dress did float (blindingly I'd wager!)
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Haha. Yes. What a typo. Thanks for pointing that out to me.
~James
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you placed! as deserved.
the imagery going on is wonderful. the whole tone of this is so soft (not sure that's the right word but none the less) and the flow is easy.
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great job
a great write! congratulations on your gold! -
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bronze* lol
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OOPS
Was a gold in my mind!
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Amazing, very different from what I have received so far. Well written, beautifully dark. Good luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
Chelsea
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Very descriptive and dard. Great job.
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