DON'T TALK TO ME
DON'T LOOK AT ME
YOU'RE NOT THE ONE I WANT
WHY DO I FIND MYSELF THINKING OF YOU
WHEN I SHOULD BE SLEEPING
NOT WRITING THIS SONG
WHY DO I CARE
YOU SHOULDN'T BE ON MY MIND
BUT YOU'RE THERE
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
I'M SCREAMING FOR YOU TO
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
I'M SCREAMING FOR YOU TO
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
GET OUT OF MY LIFE
CAN'T TALK TO YOU
CAN'T LOOK AT YOU
YOU CAN'T BE WHO I WANT
WHY DO I FIND MYSELF LOOKING AT YOU
WHEN I SHOULD BE HIDING
NOT GETTING CAUGHT
YOU CAUGHT ME IN A STARE
YOU SHOULDN'T BE IN MY HEAD
BUT YOU'RE THERE
YOU'RE THE FACE I SEE IN THE WINDOW
WHY DO I CARE, IT'S NOTHING NEW
I SHOULD BE THINKING OF SOMEONE ELSE
BUT SOMEHOW I'M THINKING OF YOU
I WISH I WERE DEAD,
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
I'M SCREAMING FOR YOU TO
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
I'M SCREAMING FOR YOU TO
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
GET OUT OF MY LIFE
I'M SCREAMING FOR YOU TO
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
I'M BEGGING FOR YOU TO
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
I'M DYING FOR YOU TO
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
GET OUT OF MY HEAD
Author notes
it's like a metal song. critique welcome.
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A contest entry
- I Can Not Look - closes late this evening by CarolDesjarlais.
600 points, ended May 1, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The deepest darkest within by Taintednightengale.
450 points, ended May 24, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Insane? or just nervous? by Death4Hire13.
390 points, ended June 7, 2007, 34 entries
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Powerful. Usually the things that you don't want to think about seem to stick in your head, and drill away. I know how that feels, and it sucks. I like the flow of your poem though. I usually don't like poems that repeat themselves, but it worked for your poem. Very well done. Good luck in my contest!
p.s. Bunny!! Thumbs up*
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this was a great write and i really enjoyed reading this your words were strong, powerful and emotional as well..this poem flowed really well and i enjoyed reading this..keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
~Chrissy~ -
hmm
its very strong and i like the lyrics, but its too repeating you know, but then it is a song, but i wasnt lloking for a song lol.
DON'T TALK TO ME
DON'T LOOK AT ME
YOU'RE NOT THE ONE I WANT
WHY DO I FIND MYSELF THINKING OF YOU
WHEN I SHOULD BE SLEEPING
NOT WRITING THIS SONG
WHY DO I CARE
YOU SHOULDN'T BE ON MY MIND
BUT YOU'RE THERE
I love the first time you say this. its very powerfull and your really speaking out , lol. i also like the capitlization. its like your yelling at them, lol
good job
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Strong...and yes, I can se it is a song..a very angry song...angry at oneself, truly, for not being able to block it. Powerfully written and surely a hit.
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Very Strong poem I could realy feel the emotion.
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