The sun sets,
Now it's my time to shine.
I'll come out of my den,
Thirsty and longing for life.
Watching the road ahead,
Searching and looking,
For that perfect one.
Then she comes along.
Virgin and all,
Beautiful with long hair,
Pearly skin and metallic eyes.
At first she resists,
She struggles to get free.
Then she closes her eyes,
As I sink my teeth in her soft flesh.
So warm and sweet,
Her innocent pure blood runs down my throat.
Sucking her clean dry,
Until I am satisfied.
I have the power now.
She'll either die or become one of us.
Take this life,
Behold the power,
The strength of the immortal.
We will rule the race one day,
Everyone will wish to become one of us.
The all powerful, the all mighty,
We live forever.
With just a little seduction,
You'll be our next victim.
Author notes
I love the power he shows in this picture...
http://i26.photobucket.com/albums/c121/darq_shadows/anime%20boys/vampires/chains.jpg
and both the male and female together in this picture:
http://i69.photobucket.com/albums/i67/Jonashotep/Anime%20Normal/Vampires.jpg
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Great
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This was a good piece. Very good descriptions and imagery. However, I wouldnt label it under the Erotica category, it doesnt seem to be erotica at all. So anyways, I liked this piece. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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A very dark and intriquing insight into the mind of a vampire- quite chilling in fact. Best of luck in the contest!
David Michaels
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Alright job...
Great imagery, but I think that the arhythmic flow made it a somewhat abrasive read. I was pulled in to a few key areas of groups of words eliciting powerful imagery, but just couldn't seem to flow easily from one line to the next. Not bad, but I think you can do a little better. -
great !!no words to describe it
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This is terrific!!!!!!!!!!!!! you totally got the point across i love this. this is absolutely amazing
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