What defines a girl like me?
Is it my skin, my eyes, or my personality?
What about the way I speak?
The stories, the rumors and lies I leak.
How about the way I stroll?
Do I bounce, slide, or rock’n’roll?
Or How about my height?
Am I too tall or short for my ability to fight?
Or maybe it’s my weight.
Am I too fat or skinny to date?
None of this seems far to me.
Categorizing my human being.
My skin is white and my eyes are blue
But my personality needs a review.
I speak fast, but think slow
And the stories I’ve told are from years ago.
I walk with a tilt and add my own limp
And to me I look pretty pimp.
I believe I’m pretty tall
Tall enough to trip and fall.
My weight isn’t that skinny
So for a nickname, don’t call me Minnie.
My human being isn’t the same
But I guess that’s part of life’s game.
A game in which I must change,
In a world of the strange.
We’re different in many ways,
Adding and subtracting our endless days.
My name is Ashley and I’m seventeen,
The different between you and I is what we’ve seen.
I’m young and in school
And have been played for a fool.
I’m scared, quiet, and shy,
And have wanted to die.
My past is a nightmare within itself
written in books upon the shelf.
I’ve been known to slice
when ever you mess with my dice.
And my shades always change
when ever my mood beings to rearrange.
So what can I really say to define me?
My eyes, knife, age or sexuality.
I’m Ashley and that’s all I want to be
A girl so complicated as can be.
A girl who changes her mind left to right
and doesn’t care to put up a fight.
I’m a girl whose tall and fat
and randomly called a brat.
I don’t mind what you say
It’ll be me till my dying day.
A day in which I’ve come to see
why I’ve been put on this earth to be.
A model, teacher, mother
or a God loving preacher?
But who ever I grow up to be,
Ashley is who everyone will see.
Author notes
I always have the habbit of running off track when it comes to writing poetry and start bouncing around but i feel that i did some good defining of myself..well i hope i did.
Contest rule: 'Patent Pending is an awesome group'
A contest entry
- Who Are You??? For BIG POINTS :) by GiftedPsychosis.
4000 points, ended May 23, 2007, 74 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love it
it all flows very nicely
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Perfectly written
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Excellent write Excellent
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Totally love this poem...I think I'm gonna use your first stanza as the section I pick for your contest. Can't Wait!
<3 Jenerali -
hey i can really relate to ur what defines me poem or whatever it is...very good...
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ha ha i liked this..seems we have some stuff in commom..great job and it flowed nicly..always be who u want to be and never who everyone wants u to be..stay true to yourself!great job babe!
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Awww, that is good. It send the message I like to hear... dont catigorize!!! LIKE ALOTS!!!
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you did kinda run of track but then you picked it back up but despite the rhyming i dont like poetry that rhymes most of the time all around i got a pretty good idea of who you are great job..
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good
i like the poem it sounds like you know yourself pretty well.lol
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I liked this poem. It was a really nice way to describe yourself, in my opinion at least. I can't believe it stayed up so long w/o comments.
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That was really neat how you described yourself (in a way) And the constant questioning was great. Made the reader wanna think, well at least me This is an awesome write. I will definitley check in more to find more stuff like this and/or others that are also good which I know you probably have some that you like
hope to see more soon
-TragicallyInspired -
Cool
THis was a great poem! I really enjoyed reading it! Very beautiful piece> I love the description You you use! Very good! Great Write!
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i really like that...your a really good poet.
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wow this is an amazing poem i really like it and the way u defined yourself as being un definable by one word... if that makes sence lol. It was a good write and made me feel really positive towards myself =] x
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this poem is really cool, i really like it, i love the different ways you define yourself,its a very well set out piece congratulations on a great write! i look forward to reading some more
~Valen~
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hey hun
this is really good
one question tho on line 11 is it ment to be fair ? not far just wondering draling
but other then n that its a great poem and i really like it
well done
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excellent poem, dear sorry it took me so long to comment, i've been busy with contests and work and emotions have not been good for me dear. well excellent poem,
keep writing
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YEAH:))))
Good job you should be loved for you not who you are
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yay
This is a great piece of work!!! Great job and you did an excellent job describing yourself! Keep up the good work! also i loved how you kept it positive, i wouldnt have been able to...
tearstaindangel
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wow great write couldent be better I liked how u put your feelings into it most ppl have trouble doing that and u did that perfect great jod! -
awesome
i like this poem it really does have a positive feel 2 it great write
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This poem really does have a positive feel to it apart from the hints of a drak past. It's a really good poem and hopefully one which more will read. I particually liked the second part, it had great rythm and emotion.
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This was great!
and if youre a model youre not fat..lol. but yeah. Great write..keep your head up. I like how positive this poem was and how it wasnt too long or too short..it was just right...so yeah..its like omg awesome
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