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I See

I see the rose bud of blossom bloom

Extracting the negativity, of this earths gloom

You stand before me, so delicate to touch

Hearing your whisper, I need you so much

 

I lick and I taste your delicious delights

I pray on my knee’s as days turn to nights

I drop on all fours, as you watch in great glee

Waiting your turn to satisfy me

 

Seducing me slowly you stick out your tongue

Caressing my needs just where you belong

You slap and you tickle this sweet thigh of mine

Exporting this pleasure is simply divine

Your drive and your thrust

They make me insane

I see in your eyes

That you want me again

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  • Zenda-Lokki gold member
    December 10, 2008
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    A much deserved gold trophy with this sensual write. I prefer this to your other entry. Thanks xx


  • The Drifter
    August 12, 2008
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    I See

    VEry good--very hot--makes one dream dereams.


  • mtpoet
    April 8, 2008
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    The picture speaks... The poem is...


    • Laura
      April 8, 2008
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      thank you i think the personification of the poem rather complimented the picture as well

  • TranquilSea
    January 7, 2008
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    I sobbed when I read this
    Beautiful


  • raggyann
    December 30, 2007

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    hot and sexy
    and done in great taste too i might add
    got some great images from this one


  • Michael A. de Melo
    December 28, 2007

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    Enticing!

    You painted a picture here that arouses the mind, body, and soul. I was tantalized and satisfied. I find it hard to write sensual poetry myself, but I'd say you've got it down. I'm off for a cold shower.


  • sassylibra0074
    December 23, 2007
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    NICE

    This piece gives great imagery, love the choice of words.

  • davidwright silver member
    December 23, 2007

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    I'm not certain whether this an expression of lust or a sexual encounter. Good write though. For your information there is an erotic poetry site labelled "Literotica." It's a community page much the same as Allpoetry


  • sidewinder silver member
    December 20, 2007

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    romance found within that scent of a breeze where love strikes between two hearts!


    Wonderful work my friend!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • Ellis gold member
    December 14, 2007

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    Excellent Writing

    You have me panting, all hot and bothered
    girl at an age I could have fathered
    I don't care, you just turn me on
    Tonight I'll imagine I don't sleep alone!
    -----------


  • MiSs ImPeRfEcTiOn
    November 20, 2007
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    lov it


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 23, 2007

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    Stunning Writing

    Stunning writing here. Brilliant imagery. Wonderful passion and emotion in this piece. More please.

    All the best
    Wayne
    x


  • Darkened Seraph
    September 8, 2007

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    lol another pretty shiny you were doing good when you were writing at this time, this is a amazingly beautiful write and one which was very pretty in the descriptions well done of the pretty shiny

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    Ahhh now eye see why you have won gold with this piece, it was a little tickler wasn't it... I love the way this is done with style and not smutty like some can be

    Karen


  • autumns rising
    August 29, 2007
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    um...wow. Thats hot! lol. great erotica, not raunchy and uncomfortable, just right.
    Congrats


  • zimzam
    August 18, 2007

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    great

    this poem was really amazing...had me full to the core... great job... sensuously refreshing and rejuvenating.... satisfy me more...


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    July 16, 2007
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    wonderful go me a bit hot an botherd lol flow of this piece was verry well done great job


  • Lowell Poe
    July 13, 2007

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    OPEN A WINDOW, IT'S GETTING WARM

    I need to smoke a fag. Not an easy subject to write about.You did it with class.It is such a definite subject and i am so used to writing in abstract forms. Sometimes a poet has to be direct, where their is know question on what is meant. To say it is hard for me might be a bad choice of words. This very direct form of writing takes a poet who is in tune with the universe. You ask if something else could be added, I say a definite no.Rephrasing any thing here would be a mistake.It's lustful honesty makes this a killer poem.

    BLESSINGS,
    LOWELL POE


  • Jarrod
    July 6, 2007

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    a very nice erotica and to top it off the rhyming scheme was well done. I am happy to see that this piece got a gold!!

  • Improv Machinery
    June 22, 2007

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    nicely done. im not a very big reader of erotica but this one really hooked me in. the word usage, the rhyme scheme and the imagery all combined to make a very delicious recipe. i am definitely going to read more of your work.
    take it easy,
    Rob


  • Kari gold member
    June 12, 2007

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    I really enjoyed the rhyme in this. I really think that you do have very good talent. Congrats on your gold here. Very well done

    Kari


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    June 10, 2007

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    I love this picture as it really sets the tone for your poem. It is so well written as I read it and looked at the picture, it was as if it was talking to me, whispering softly, begging, pleading to be fully satisfied.

    You really have a special way in expressing yourself within this style of poetry. I can see why you earn the gold trophy as this really is a masterpiece...


  • dking
    May 16, 2007

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    Steam!

    Raw sensuality oozes from this one! Great combination of mind and body images make it unique. I see why you won the contest!


  • CherylAnn
    May 12, 2007

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    WOW

    this is just beautifully written.I love it!Erotic with class.you don't see much of that around hereYou did a wonderful job penning this one
    Blessings
    ~Cheryl~


  • panegyric ink
    May 12, 2007

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    oh yeah!!!

    completely gold!!!! i loved the exotic feel that sings through U in thes sensual thoughts!!!!!!!

    whew, i'm gettin' a little sweaty with this!!!!!!

    brian


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    May 12, 2007

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    well blow me, where did this come from??? dont answer, it'll only make things harder.
    This is hot,hot,hot.
    good rhyme, good rythm, excellent imagery painted and well seen the host gave you a gold.


  • firechilde
    May 7, 2007

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    :D mm

    Tasty as a cream puff...tantilizing with its perfection of words.Fun and awesome.Spiritual almost in devotion...i love it!


  • freebutsafe
    May 7, 2007
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    vivaciously erotic...love it! Very good input on seduction and lust...Condgradulations on the gold!


  • Selenas
    May 7, 2007

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    Runs to the Shower.....*grins*

    *purrs* Talk about a visual here....I need to take a shower and take advantage of the handheld unit I have oh that might be WTMI. *giggles* Very well written...sensual and Yummy!

    Sel~

  • torturedsoul9876
    May 7, 2007

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    Very Good

    Very very good for an erotic poem. i like it. if you would like you can check out my poems. i look forward to seeing more of your work.


  • BeAuT1FuLlyXxBrOkEn
    May 7, 2007

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    haha...i like erotic poems...especially when they aren't all just oh fuck me harder...when they seem more sensual, as this piece did. Great write, thanks for sharing!


  • The Cube
    May 6, 2007
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    Great write, and very well done. Congrats on the gold too. Really good analogy and use of words.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    May 3, 2007

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    This is really great hot erotic write. Wonderful choice of words---very enticing
    This is a Hell-of-a-good-verse...

    "I lick and I taste your delicious delights

    I pray on my knee’s as days turn to nights

    I drop on all fours, as you watch in great glee

    Waiting your turn to satisfy me"

    I love to rhyme and you did a brilliant job rhyming in this erotic. Keep up the great work. I'll have to read more.

    Bo

    Laura who is so sweet refered me to your piece and I'm damn glad she did


  • Kiusha
    May 2, 2007

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    This is lovely! I especially like the second stanza, where you have it sound almost as a religious experience. I think knee's should be knees there. I like the ending too, like a promise for more. Congrats on the gold.

  • Nicole Hanna
    May 2, 2007

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    I'm always weirded out by erotica that rhymes. I don't know why. lol. But honestly, you did a great job with your beat. There was never a pause, no hang-ups anywhere. It flowed well from line to line from beginning to end. Because of that, I was able to get into this a lot more than I otherwise would. Says a lot about the care you take with your verse.


  • deep space
    May 2, 2007

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    sensuous

    this is my favourite poem by you,well done,it is very sensuous,with a great flow to it,well done luv best wishes


  • Naridill gold member
    May 2, 2007

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    Nicely done. I even like this, as for me who doesn't have a taste for any kind of erotica most times. But I havent read much, I have to admit. But this has a nice flow and a beauty about it. Well done.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 1, 2007

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    Oh my! You have done it again you saucy wench and this time with wonderful rhyme
    Excellent penning and the first rhyme I think I have read from you.
    Extremely sensual and nailbiting read!
    All the best with this
    Gaylene


  • soldiersoul gold member
    April 30, 2007
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    verrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry nice...i sank my teeth into this...um...poem lol...good luck


  • PerVirtuous
    April 30, 2007
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    I see the answer to a mid-life crisis. *sigh* Three bunnies and a wink in your direction.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    April 30, 2007

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    WOW
    where did this come from
    another fantastic poem
    with wonderful imagery in it
    well done
    good luck


  • Whoochi gold member
    April 30, 2007

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    Oh totally Brill, dammit, ya should not enter the same contest as me...this is well deserving, makes me well...you know.... MUUAHH


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 30, 2007
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    I love it. It makes me horny! and the rhyming is great!


  • Deliverance
    April 30, 2007

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    I am gobsmacked, has an alien taken over your body?
    Where is the freeversing Laura we all know and... tolerate?
    Amazing write, it rhymes *pinches self to wake up* nope, it still rhymes.
    Wow.


  • Shadow Lynx
    April 30, 2007

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    Very sensual and sexy ,it rhymes beautifully and flows easily great use of vocabulary to make this possible ,if i had to change anything i would change the word earths in the second line to earthly but thats just my humble opinion Very enjoyable read im off for a cold shower lol !


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    April 30, 2007

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    Wow....this place is getting to be a hot spot...
    Great job on this...love these lines....

    Exporting this pleasure is simply divine
    Your drive and your thrust
    They drive me insane
    I see in your eyes
    That you want me again

    Soulful Woman


  • Blueskywonder
    April 30, 2007

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    exellent!!! This is hot and unusual for you to rhyme but i think ou have done an exellent job with this piece. It sort of leaves one longing EXELLENT!!

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