Born into the valley of the shadow of death
Dying even before taking the very first breath
Words have been bound to give life some hope
Sometimes they can help temporarily to cope
Looking and struggling to what....achieve?
Searching for something in which to believe?
Born into the valley of the shadow of death
Dying even before taking the very first breath
People cause heartache, misery and pain
Power hungry barbarians in this world do reign
Tiny specks of dust manipulated by the wind
Not in control as we like to pretend
Freedom is a smokescreen from the powers that be
Confusing the reality of what we're allowed to see
Born into the valley of the shadow of death
Dying even before taking the very first breath
Just a dark journey we really do take alone
Across mountains, through valleys, wherever we're blown
Walking with others sometimes along the way
Effecting their journey by what we think, do, and say
Stop and look at what has happened due to greed
How much of everything does one really need?
Born into the valley of the shadow of death
Dying even before taking the very first breath
Look deep inside, if you don't like something you see
Make necessary changes, rearrange your priorities
In this one way trip we've given greed the upper hand
Before the shadow gets shorter let us make a stand
We can make our journey better and help others too
We can make a difference by what we say and do
Born into the valley of the shadow of death
Let's make life better before we take our last breath
Author notes
Option 4: Other
A contest entry
- Seekers of Love, Paradise, or Peace by Wandering Spirit.
600 points, ended May 6, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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excellent
Wow Jeannie, very powerful write, reality at it finest, goes back to that saying, it is not what you take but what you leave when you go..Always amazed at what you talented hand can deliver..Always priviledged to read
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powerful message
Your words deliver a very powerful message. It is sad that this world has so much greed in it. It seems people never have the time to stop and think about what really is or should be important in their lives.
The repetitiveness of these lines,
"Born into the valley of the shadow of death
Dying even before taking the very first breath"
is very effective in this poem.
Excellent write!
Best wishes in the contest!
Ethereal Melody
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Very powerful poem!!
I love the repetition and rhyme within too.
Great write!!
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Wow!
Powerful verse penned my Friend
Takes the reader there to experience and I imagine
there are others who could relate!
Images raise the hairs and gives the Mind
much to think about~
Thank You for sharing this!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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