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The Storm

                                 

 

 

 

 

                                                             

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The mist hangs heavy,

an aftermath of the storm.

The great willow bends

its mighty boughs, shedding

tears upon the soil.

Revitalizing, generating life.

Each breath filled with the

scents of nature.

The petals of the flowers

seem abaze, with a shinning

beauty of colors.

The halo of a rainbow,

painted across the sky.

Daring all who see

to find its gold.

The wonders of a

summers storm.

                                   

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  • AlternateCandidate
    July 28, 2007
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    I love the direction you took with this poem. Your description was very clear and specific, and I got many different sensory emotions from it. I think that some phrases, such as "shining beauty of colors" and "rainbow, painted across the sky" are overused, but I do like the overall feeling the piece gives. Thank you for entering!


  • Candy6
    June 6, 2007
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    good

  • mysty rain
    May 13, 2007

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    You have brought beauty to one of my most favorite things of God's wonders...thunderstorms. Afterwards, the air is so fresh and clean and the rainbows come out to greet us. All is well with nature again. I have been blessed to see two different double rainbows in my life. What an awesome sight it is. This poem brings out the best of a thunderstorm, cleansing our world and making everything glisten. Keep up the writing my friend. I hope all is going well for you. Your friend in Poetry, Mysty Rain


  • Swangrnv gold member
    May 4, 2007

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    Another impressive effort,though I prefer a slightly longer journey into the imagery you create.All n'all
    good!


  • Flossy
    May 2, 2007

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    I don't really like the last two lines, but that's just me. they seem to veer off away from your subject. it's very wonderful though


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 2, 2007

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    You have described a picture which seems to be an original beauty because of the word choice of your poem and because of its concept presenting in a rythemic beauty of the poetic endevour...a great poem


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 30, 2007

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    WOW! TAKES MY BREATH AWAY!

    I just love to sit and watch a thunder storm in the summer time. You can feel the cooler air as it blows across your face and one can smell the wet air, one just has to be there to appreciate it.

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