Make a list and set a goal
Light the Match...
Reach it and now you're whole
Light the Match...
First apply and then interview
Light the Match...
Play the cards right and they'll hire you
Light the Match...
Working hard, time for a raise
Light the Match...
Live your life to the fullest of days
Light the Match...
The place you've worked, you now own
Light the Match...
Just goes to show, how hard work has grown
Light the Match...
Time to retire, and lay to rest
Light the Match...
Time to lye and bask in your success
Light the Match...
You've now filled your desire...
Light the Match...
"...you must set yourself on fire"
Light the Match...
Author notes
"Success is not a result of spontaneous combustion, you must set yourself on fire"
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Nice imagery you've provided in this poem. I see a man, becoming successful and striving to stay successful. You used the quote very nicely. Well done.
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Ah..quite moving pieces and flashes of your wonderful and strong thoughts are here ..I love all of it..well done..and my thanks for such a wonderful sharing..
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I actually liked this.
Specially since I was thinking about
playing with fire today. Anyyyway,
great work, I think it should have won something.
Good work!
..Simply Me♥
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Like I have said "Great poetry writes itself" ... I HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH IT OCCIFER (<--that was on purpose *lmao* )
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A wonderful, thought provoking poem... Simple and to the poem, but I like the phrase you came up with and I could see it being the slogan to a major company or something like that. Thanks for entering
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I understand the repetition. I think it would have sounded, felt..better if you had used light the match after that last line..but I don't know wha tit would sound like, soo I can't tell you what to do.
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interesting. i like it. it can be difficult to have something repeat so much and not take away from the poem. but this does it well. *smiles*
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Typically, I'm never one for repetition unless it's done right and actually serves a purpose for the write as a whole. In this case, the repetition wss used to the write's advantage greatly as well as you incorporating a partial part of the quote in your write. Keep penning and thank you for entering
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