Golden notes pens softly on sheets of the sky.
White birds of dawn could hum it so well,
Of your kiss so melodic with such cadence.
A redden on the sky still speaks of love sensations,
And the glaciers have trembled so, I recalled,
White birds of dawn skillfully sings the song.
Stamped in the sky of steel
notes of your kiss.
Must I play it on the bed
of my tongue where I rest,
those eloquent words,
“I love you too”?
Must I play those notes?
So that I can feel you,
So my ears may recall
The sound so sweet,
Yet it might leave this soul,
On a bread of weep,
And I'm afraid your absentness,
shall only feed it
to my soul
A broken verse tis I
fill the line with
the touch of love's bliss
heaven's soft birds
He spoke
in words of those kisses
not to long ago
and you remember it oh so well
Play it again for me
but now slowly
Soft birds of dawn!
Play as if it's my last song!
In a list
A contest entry
- Love... Envy... Fabulous by Pretty Britty.
750 points, ended April 4, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Play as if it's my last song!
I loved that last line just... BAM! A powerful write! -
Thank you for the entry, it was a beautiful poem!
Good Luck! -
In this line:
"not to long ago"
It should be "too" instead of "to".
This piece is just so sweet. I love that there's a deeper meaning to this than the usual love poems. Good job! -
very sweet, innocent and yet ultimately powerful. the last line only uses simple words, and yet the impact it leaves is truly astounding! very well done.
God bless,
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this was a really powerful write..i really enjoyed reading this..your words were powerful and emotional keep writting your talented
~Chrissy~ -
Is this about one of our conversations? Well, I'm so sorry I didn't call last night. I was at my aunts and she don't have long distance. By the time I got home it was too late. But I'll call tommorrow thoguh I got a track meet today.
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no it wasn't bout u. lol
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Beautiful
absolutely lovely.
I love this piece.
thank you so much for sharing this ,these are all of my favorite things.
A kiss
Some music and beautiful birds to carry natures sweet love song...Play it Again......Bravo
Peace
~M~
Golden notes pens on sheets of the sky.
White birds of dawn could hum it so well,
Of your kiss so melodious with such rhythm.
A blush on the sky still speaks of love sensations,
And the glaciers have trembled so, I recalled,
White birds of dawn so beautifully they sing the song.
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This is so beautiful!!! It makes me happy. I love the passion in this piece for it is vivid. Great write and may many more come to be.
Beka
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