Please end this melody of the toxic darkness.
These scars on my flesh, were but dreams.
The blood that fell on your lips, full of grace.
I am forever bound to the shattered mirror.
The shattered gleaming blade, once so mesmerizing.
Who knew of the lies, of the sweet elegance?
Just as alcohol and cocaine.
One last kiss, then meet your demise.
The memories were replaced by my razor.
Who knew of the lies, of the sweet suicide?
A contest entry
- contest!!! (no rules) by nobodys-girl.
1700 points, ended July 5, 2007, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks everyone again who has commented on my poems. Thanks nobodys-girl!
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oOo very beautiful in such a suicude way. i love the line "the momories were replaced by my razor". that's how i lived my life for years. anyway thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Cool!!
I love it. it has very good word choise and it really is you.
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Thanks to everyone who commented! Yes Josie, I did write some happy poems if you just look at ALL my poetry. Thanks again everyone!
AmberAngel546 -
UM..
Now about those happy poems.... -
Very chilling to be sure, and though I'm not really too keen on suicide, you've really captured the feelings of someone driven to the razor's edge.
David Michaels
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Good
interesting to say the least... a subject of contestment in society. ALthough well penned and written
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