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Never Too Late

I Challenged death, I tempted fate
I renewed my faith just a little too late.

Breath escapes me with every gasp.
I run and run away from my past.

I cursed heaven and praised the devil,
My moral sunk to his level.

In one last moment I called for His help,
My soul was saved as the devil caved.

I Challenged death, I tempted fate
But to God I was never too late.

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  • Tali28
    June 16, 2007
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    Good write. I like this alot. Keep up the good work. I wish you luck in the contest. Take care.
    Tali


  • Tali28
    June 4, 2007
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    Thanks

    Thank you for your entry. I will be back later after the contest ends to give you my comments.
    Tali


  • DancingRed
    May 19, 2007

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    A very powerful piece, full of the darkness of reality but also a shining hope. I love the phrase "I tempted fate." I'm not sure about the changed rhyme scheme in lines 7 and 8 - it mucks up the flow a bit in my opinion. Overall, it is well rhymed.
    Also, the dark blue is a little hard to read on grey.
    Thanks for entering.
    DancingRed.

  • amy86
    April 30, 2007

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    this is really very good. very too the point i love the line `i challenged death` im not very good at reviews but i love this poem. well done x