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Strength Of A Broken Angel

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With the strength of a broken angel

I was cast upon this land,

alone and without guidance,

not knowing what God planned.

 

My only misdemeanour

was to love an earth bound soul,

a man who could no longer cope

his shattered life not whole.

 

At first he wanted nothing

but friendship strong and true,

with our time together

feelings changed and grew.

 

He called me ‘his sweet angel’,

I kept him from lifes harms,

my wings cradled his body

he held me in his arms.

 

I knew I was at fault

for loving this lonely man,

what was I to do

as our life together began.

 

Powers now diminished

my love grows ever strong,

a broken angel, weak but loved,

I know now, I belong.

 

 

 

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  • piccola silver member
    July 23, 2007

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    This is lovely and the rhyme is great. the subject matter is very creative and I just love the feelings it presents. Great work.


  • Death of the Author
    July 4, 2007

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    Aww this is excellent, I think this is my favourite I've read in this contest so far, so best of luck! I love the idea of it and the way you told the story was superb. Take care! xx


  • Dead Hair
    July 3, 2007

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    I love it! The Shot Down Angel would be proud! I always imagined her as the type of person to be involved in a love that hurts. The flow to this is really nice, and everything was well played out.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    May 12, 2007

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    Hey this is really lovely and so deep and meaningful. You have used the title well and your picture of a feather is quite poignant. Well done.


  • starXcrossedxlover
    May 1, 2007

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    aww

    WOW sue, this is really something, it's so touching! I'm so glad you've shared this beutiful write. i really like it, there's just this quality your poem has that makes me love it so. AMAZING JOB! As it suggests, I'm going to say how the use of the title and the poem go so well; I like how you said he was broken, but he has all the strength in the world to make you love him--- I think that's whta you're getting at, but tell me if I'm wrong.
    Great job sue!
    P.S. Can you read [downhill for charlie] for me and comment on it because no one did and i need some insite, Ha ha. Thanks in advance and once again- great poem ^

    -HD


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 30, 2007

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    Wonderful piece

    The rhyme in this piece is just great. The words are perfect. There is a certain sadness to this piece that sort of floats in the background. The flow is really lovely as well. Brilliant piece of work.

    Well done Sue, I like this a lot.

    Wayne
    xxxx


  • DareU2Byourself
    April 30, 2007

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    First, that third stanza is so perfect--for what you said, it could not have been said more perfectly!! The whole write is wonderful! Great rhyme and flow. The rest of the write is pretty perfect as well, I just had to mention that third one because it's extra perfect, heehee. The last one is incredible as well. What talent!! Great write, sweetheart. Thanks so much for sharing. Take care!!

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