Sometime hearts so full of love
overflow, and spill joy too abundantly.
Enlarging, to accomodate those she loves
and cares for, enriching those she touches.
When she needs them, in time of fear or pain.
All those souls who know her gather
to write, hugging within freindly ink,
sending AP prayers and love to Debilynn.
copywrite 2007
Tamera Dobbins
all rights reserved
A contest entry
- Prayers, love and support for Debilynn by Freed by Mercy.
950 points, ended May 9, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love what you express here. You have a couple of errors which I can point out for you to fix, if you'd like.
Sometime hearts so full of love
overflow and spill joy (to) abundantly. (drop word "to")
Enlarging to accomodate those she loves
and cares for, adding more lives she (touchs). ("touches")
When she needs them, in time of fear or pain.
All those souls who know her will gather
round about her and send prayers above.
And she will feel (thier) enduring love. ("their")
Other than these typos, this is a lovely poem. Thank you for entering the contest.
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thank you so much for this heartfelt prayer. i feel so humbled being the center of so much attention. keep writing! God bless you always
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