he gets an idea
he sits down to write
as the words flow into his mind
his arm tries its best
converts feeling to print
as if the two were entwined
the words flow so free
the pen dances along
and he's left with a work well done
he is proud of himself
and this talent he has
but the story has only begun
he types in the text
at a poem website
he sets up his page as he likes
then he hits "post"
and the poem is out
and he waits for his comments to spike
the first one he sees
is a small little phrase
"you did a nice job on this one"
and although it's plain
he is happy enough
but it's not like he hit a home run
cause the next little comment
is not what he expected
and he's actually a little ticked off
it read just like this
"ok, i guess"
and the author took this as a scuff
"who does this guy
think that he is?
like his poems are works of art!"
then he sent a reply
to tell the guy off
but, oh, what a mess did he start
they went back and forth
a couple of times
and the commenter was so confused
he made a simple statement
about another's work
and the author acts like he's some muse
just to let you know
you just might be
the only one who likes your stuff
and if some call you bad
do not get mad
cause all you will get is some guff
A contest entry
- By Invite Only by Heavens Child.
550 points, ended May 2, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This has a great message.... if you're serious about improving your poetry you have to be open to constructive critism. Good write.
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u think this is good, i mean you did a great job on this, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest, this is long too ,lol
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someone pissed me off so i wrote.
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It's good, the message is better than the actual piece though. "Everyone to their own" explains it, meaning that everyone likes different things and styles.
Something that caught my eye though, "his arm tries it's best", I can totally understand here. When I get an idea in my head, and if it's a good one, I write it down but 9 out of 10 times, my hands can't keep up with my mind
Either that or I'm in the shower when I come up with the most brilliant idea, chorus or stanza 
Nice write, good luck in the contest.
SLAM.
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