Broken tape dispenser, more significant
Falling again as the water rises
Head hot, you snap back
Unsure if the movements were yours
A product of whatever mental disorder they’ll throw at you
You love, but something just isn’t right now
Why do you flinch?
Hope they don’t see the missing part
And every hand feels better than the last
As you try not to break, no reason
But staring at the pavement there’s nothing
Why is there nothing?
The confusion seeps in,
Always feeling off
And now you see
It’s not intuition, it’s you
But speaking now you don’t know
Only wanting an explanation
Only needing an arm around you
The pixels don’t make sense anymore
Why the hell are you shaking?
Every pair of eyes you look into look away
Deep breath
Fucking tiles
Coming closer as you fall
Start to cry
Sick of watching yourself implode
And just when you need them they’re gone
Why the fuck won’t you stop screaming?
You’re alone but not lonely
Trying to calm yourself
It’s nothing
Worrying get’s no one somewhere
And everyone nowhere
Everyone’s been here, there’s nothing wrong
But the loss of control says something different
Soaring through your head like a scratched DVD
Fleeting, Repeating, Defeating And....
Where did you go?
Author notes
Sooo... I don't think anyone who reads it will get it, and i'm sure everyone will think it's about something else, which is bound to have nothing to do what it actually is about... if that makes sense. It's supposed to be read pretty fast paced, so if you go about it all slow and analyze each line, it'll sound worse. Erm. Yeah. Have fun with that one.
Please tell me what you think
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Oh, I had fun with it.
The first thing that came to mind when I was trying to figure out my response to this was: holy shit. Wow.
And yeah, it read fast paced. The way you use very little punctuation ensures that.
I'd leave a longer comment, but to try and interpret this or to leave criticism would be insulting. I do have an interpretation of it, but it probably isn't the way you intended it, as you said.
So I'll just say, I'm impressed.
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Hey, it's Forest. It was pretty crazy--it sounds like my stuff when I'm being fickle and random. I'll just add in every random thing that influences me while I'm writing. The only difference is that you seem to have organized this randomness in the sense that you connected the last lines of the stanzas in a question to someone. It was very good writing, but portrays anguish (maybe you were going for that, I think it was just a little intense).
Anyway, you're right--this is a pretty odd website, not very well managed and whatnot. But I'll put some of my writing on here. I don't know how it happened, but when I was making my account it somehow ended up giving me a gold membership thing. I'm not paying for it and I guess it will expire in a couple days. Thought that was interesting.
Talk to you soon
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