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Take me Away

Let lightning strike,
and take me away
Since the joy's been taken,
Out of my day
Let my insides scream
And my soul cry out
Let my heart rip apart,
Because happiness...I doubt
Some people aren't meant to be happy
Some people aren't meant to be loved
I guess I'm in the catogory for,
all of thee above
I try to be strong
But I  barely can think
I put down my blade,
and let my pen bleed the ink
But this strong thing I'm doing,
Doesn't last but a while
I've lost the urge to laugh
And no longer can smile
When I close my eyes I dream of brighter days
Let lightning strike,
and take me away...

Author notes

Just lost in thought I guess.
This is also one of my personal favorites because it shows how strong I'm becoming by putting down my razor & letting it all out on paper & no longer myself.


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B. "Sometimes the toughest life to save is your own."
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  • EmptyFrame
    May 21

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    A very real recollection. Once you stop cutting yourself you life with it internally the rest of your life. It's always there in some way, especially at the beginning.
    You've articulated this very well.

    Good luck in the contest :


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    January 14

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    this has wonderful emotion. I have had days where it feels like no one loves me and tha I don't deserve to be loved. I hope that this is a temporary this with you too but thanks for entering.


  • fanaa
    August 10, 2008
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    Wow BEAUTIFULY written fills me with emotions i try to forget... thought i once had...its a curse..

    I try to be strong
    But I barely can think
    I put down my blade,
    and let my pen bleed the ink

    When I close my eyes I dream of brighter days
    Let lightning strike,
    and take me away...

  • Virgoan
    June 7, 2008

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    i can feel this...kind of reminded me the song 'take me away' by lifehouse.

    very nicely done.

    keep sharing your gift.


    HENSLEY


  • bananasfoster42
    June 6, 2008

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    great poem!! i've never been in the situation, but i could imagine it takes more strength to put down the blade than it does to use it. bravo, poet!


  • stealingheaven95
    June 3, 2008

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    This is a wonderful poem. my favorite park is I put down my blade, and let my pen bleed the ink. your showing that your done hurting yourself nd your finding other ways to let out your feeling. Good luck in all of your contests!!!!


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    May 29, 2008

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    I think this is an excellent written piece you have just proven that the " Pen is mightier than the Sword or " RAZOR " Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.

  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    May 22, 2008
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    This is a realy good written poem I enjoyed reading it very much so realy sad at the beginning but you showed real strength at the end I wish you good luck and much happiness.


  • serenity silvermoon
    June 10, 2007
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    this was very great thanks for sharing


  • Aquamarine.
    May 22, 2007
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    this is good.....good luck


  • Haunting Whispers
    May 8, 2007

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    Wow. The emotion is brilliant. You are a wonderful writer. Then again, those of us going through rough times usually are the best poets. Well done. Hope you doing alright.


  • angelsslayer
    May 8, 2007
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    I love the way this is written. Fab rhyme. Great emotion.


  • f32wonder
    April 29, 2007

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    WOW- This fantastic

    This is really great, it has a great rythem and flow and I love the way you portray your emotions through your poem. I like how you have a sarcastic humor in this aswell. Great work.

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