we dance in time
weaving in and out of shimmering brilliance
luminescent on the ground.
shifting beams of light
filter through the trees.
we whirl along paths
our hearts taught our feet,
and we taught each other.
shadow and light
tap upon our shoulders,
vivid as the warmth of the rays
cutting through leaves,
cutting through forests
to kiss our bodies tan.
Author notes
I know I don't capitalize at all. It's part of my writing style.
I would just like to say that this was probably the most thought-out poem I have written in quite some time. It's really, REALLY hard to try to write about something without actually saying what the thing is. The color thing was especially difficult; I use color words sometimes exclusively to convey my writing.
I really liked the challenge of writing this piece. I hope it is up to par!
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we whirl along paths
our hearts taught our feet..
I loved that line. Somehow when you dance with the one you love you never see the flaws.
Beautiful.
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