You, my darkness
My only friend.
Your callous kisses
Eat away at my soul
So starved for affection.
Drowning, disparaged
So desperate for an end, am I
For I have been robbed
Of my very essence
And my heart, ever yours
Is tarnished by your eternal sin.
Darkness, my friend.
Broken, I am
So tattered and torn
By all you have done to me.
How could you ever be so cold?
You left me alone
Craving your touch again
As another night mourns your love.
I cried out for you in anguish
But you ignored my screaming
As the clouds enshrouded my dreams.
You, my darkness
My only friend.
The night grows colder now
As I wait to feel your touch upon my skin
So vivid in my memory
You are with me in my sleep
As emotions run high
And I find myself alone again
So let the shadows carry me
To where your stillness comforts me
Where silence weeps for the loss of my love.
Author notes
Option 1: "I read the rules".
Immortal Obscurity
I'll be an aunt/cousin... something like that
The title is borrowed from that of a Trans-Siberian Orchestra song that I thought appropriate.
This was a difficult write, but I was able to tear the scars open enough to write something sad, yet beautiful at the same time. As they say, hindsight is 20/20, and I realize now that everything happened for a reason. If it weren't for Devin, then I never would have known what it meant to love someone so much that it hurt at the end, and despite the pain, I still kept the faith; Both in God and in myself.
But I have a new love now, a friend whom I wouldn't have survived without, and it is because of what happened that I have been able to love him the way I do. He has been where I have; Lost, alone, and not knowing who to turn to, and I thank God every day that he was there to save me from me. I didn't think that I would live through Christmas. But, thanks to him, I have made it through the darkness and seen the light again.
**I wanted to use the word bank but, since I don't like rhyming poems, I combined it with a second option to even things out.
***Callous, kisses, affection, disparaged, essence, tarnished, craving, ignore, vivid, emotions.
So this is it: For the one I love, and the one who showed me how.
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This was a very good poem, very can you put your AP name in the AN box please apart from that, great
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A excellent dramatic piece, I felt a few spots where kinda of cliche but this was very outstanding, much worthy of finalist spot in this contest. Thanks for entering.
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You have truly written a masterpiece. Thanks for this, I enjoyed this part the most:
Darkness, my friend.
Broken, I am
So tattered and torn
By all you have done to me.
How could you ever be so cold?
Great words, and great work.
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beautifully written each line to the next
with a wonderul smooth flow to it... i really loved this piece!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
great job!!!!
Thank you so much for entering this creative work of art into my Contest!!!!!!!
much love and respects!!!
XxLisaJazminexX
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Oh, this one just drips with pain. Thank you for entering.
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Congrats on GOLD
Congrats to you on GOLD ~~ Well done! -
I absolutely love this poem. Dark and beautiful. It touched on such deep emotion. You've done such a great job.
- laila -
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Its a very nice poem,it's from the heart and honest=)
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This is... beautifully forlorn. The word choice gave it such intense power and its form gave it great effect. The pain and raw emotion emitting from this piece is... phenominal. You have my best wishes. Kudos.
~FoDF
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This piece is definitely a sad one, almost depressing. Your author notes explain a lot, which is good - because it almost seems as if you are severely depressed in this piece! Its a good write, and your certainly convey your emotions well. I liked it, despite the darkness of it. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
Nikki -
Beautiful!!
I adore goth as well. In fact I was goth before it had a name ...yep ...i am an old chick. So I must tell you, this write was delicious...from the first bite...to the last swallow!
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This is an exceptional write, I have to admit, I was a bit dissapointed that you didn't use the word bank in rhyming form, but the way you used 'clouds enshrouded my dreams' and the word 'heartbroken' is wonderful... this screams such darkness, loneliness and heartache.
I can't possibly chose a line or lines as favourites in this write, I love the way you reused "Darkness, my only friend"..
this is very well written, well done!!!
thank you for entering this contest and good luck..
peace and light always -
Thank you for the notes in this for it reedems the sadness that eekes out of this piece. I do hope that writing such leeches at least some of the pain that obviously remains behind the scars, please let love flow through and leech the rest, do not let it fester and poison you further! The notes remind me of the country song "Thank God for the broken roads (That led me straight to you)" A song that is indeed very significant witrhin my own life as well! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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