She's cute and sweet
and real petite
and when she speaks
my heart skips a beat
This girl i speak of
you know who you are
in my night sky
their is no other star
We talk to each other
whenever we can
I think it was when we first met
i asked to be your man
i won't say your answer
for various reasons
i just want you to know
my feelings are the same
no matter what the seasons
This poem i write
expresses my love
and it says thank you
your a blessing from above
you wrote me a poem
now i return the favor
i just hope reading this
doesn't change your behavior.
Please tell me what you think
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really sweet and if you just polish it up a little you can really make this shine. Cap your I 's and there's a couple of times that "your" should be changed to "you're". but other than that great job!
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Awwh so cute <3 love it very romantic
keep writting you're great at it
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its cute..the way its written is set out very well,its good.keep it up.
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Don't you mean "you're"?
A cute piece overall,just some lines somewhat threw me off...
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I think this is a cute poem. I think some lines are too long though. The flow is ok for a while but when you have the stanza with 5 lines it threw it off. You should watch the number of syllables too. Overall it made me smile.
Just the flow.
I hope it made that girl happy
keep it up
Nakatrea -
Aww, so sweet!
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aw...lucky lady who you wrote this for...I wish someone wrote me such sweet things.
Good write
PoeticButterfly
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Very cute!! I bet she had a big smile on her face reading this!!
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this is so sweet! good job!
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Cute
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hehehe.. this is SO cute. Great job! I can only hope to find a man that can wrtie such poetry.
Great, great, great job!!
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awwwwwwww this is so sweet bro! There's nothing more sweet than a love poem from the heart for their girl. great job!
**Bloved**
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Awww how sweet..This is so lovely..and from the heart..beautiful write ~Pastel
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