Boy
For once in my life,
I think I've found true love,
I think i found the boy I wanna be wit till the day I die,
The boy that I can truly say "I love you" and mean every word of it,
The boy that makes me feel like I can be me,
The boy that makes me smile and laugh when I wanna die,
The boy who's always there when I need to talk,
The boy who says he loves me too,
The people in the past that I said I loved,
Don't even come close to this boy,
For this one is always gonna be there,
When he says It I know It's the truth,
To this day he still gives me the butterflies,
He still makes me hate waiting to see him,
Even If I saw him just a few hours earlier,
This boy Is everything I could of asked for and more,
This boy Is my life,
The boy who is my one and only real love.
A contest entry
- Love by Madison Mary.
650 points, ended September 10, 2007, 59 entries
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I thought this poem was sweet and natural but i thought it was a bit simplistic and repetitive, perhaps you should use some kind of pronouns to break up the monotonity or link some of your sentences together. Otherwise well written but i need your name in author's notes or else i can not judge your pome.
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omg i loved this but im really shocked at the same time cuz i felt like this with my ex which ended yesterday -shity for me- and his name is josh so yea great write!
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Well i'm gald you like it*thanx you =]* but i'm sry that thing wit your boy ended =[ that always sucks.
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another wonderful poem
with such dedication and love
well done
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Thanx you! =]
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