A shattered mirror
always leaves a distorted reflection,
yet I don't think these scars
would be gone if the mirror was right.
Life is fading into hell,
along with a lost melody
that sings of broken dreams and hearts.
The darkness that numbs my fingertips,
please come to me, kill me,
[spare me the pain, for I am already dead]
The delicate lips of yesterday
kiss tomorrow's sorrow,
leaving me forever lost
in today.
[how will I ever find my way?]
I've bled too many tears,
and borne too many scars
to be standing here
[it's hard to know what's real and nightmare]
and the sweet rain of lies
splatter themselves on broken hearts.
[Please let me die...]
Won't you be my superhero?
[and just kill me one more time]
Author notes
this has NOTHIN to do w/me.....
I used darkness, numb, mirror, distort, hell, kiss, fading, shattered, scars, delicate, rain, sweet, lies, and superhero.... I think that's it.
A contest entry
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450 points, ended May 13, 2007, 11 entries
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Comments
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Writing from wordbanks I find quite difficult, but you've done a great job here! You most certainly have a talent and it amazes me that a poet of such a young age is capable of expressing thoughts and feelings of such depth with skill and perception. The metaphor you use is creative and your writing style is so good that many older poets could learn a thing or two from you. Great work. Keep writing; your talent will flourish as you do and I think you will write (even more) magnificent things in future. I enjoyed being on this page to read. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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Damn. I was just thinking... wow. You're good. And right now, that's about all I can think... great poem!
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That was amazing...
((i'm guessing you used the wordbank and i'd like to say could you write which words you used in your authours notes thanks))
i truely liked this peice, you've written an emotional and amazing peice for someone who this has nothing to do with and i congradulate you on that.
it isnt always easy to write about something you havn't experienced.
good luck.
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