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I need you to survive

Sometime I feel
I need you to survive

Mom and dad kept away the monster from under the bed
Now I'm all grown
Only u can keep away the scary voices up in my head
They say I’m alone

I'd rather be broke then rich and lonely
I strive 4 the better 4 us not me only
Its hard 2 hang with friends imagine phonies
Its a different love when it comes from families and and homies

Cause some thing is still missing
Deep inside my heart is still wishing
My mind is still itching

That’s cause I need u 2 survive

I act hard 2 admit it
I say I’m a man
But in the dark the tears are committed
Cause I feel pain

My days are full adventure
No one 2 tell it to
I put it all in to scripture
Alone my days are blue

I ain’t a pet person
Though a poetic person
I can’t describe how much I’m hurtin(g)

So I’m a look up to the Holly Mountains
Hopping for rescue
pray God take a way the pain

Of having no hope to one day have you

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  • Whoochi gold member
    May 5, 2007

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    was good even with the occasional rhyme...Keep looking to him to ease the pain, in the meantime, in my prayesr, Hold the head high and keep on pressing forward!


  • Samantha-.
    April 29, 2007

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    Pretty good. I liked the scattered rhyme. It was really pretty. The sixth stanza was my favorite. Good luck!!!