From deep within I am falling
Screaming, crying I am calling
My heart is on fire tonight
Today is in observance of my death
My pheonix arises in a new breath
Shedding ashes of my misery
No more is the man that you once knew
With the strength to love only you
I will stand tall to face change
I had to swim the river of tears
For too many of my precious years
How long can you tread the water
See what you had now that it is gone
It was wrong to treat me like a pawn
I forgive you but, I cannot forget
For you, my heart still holds a place
You just cannot quicken its pace
You will be a friend from now on
My shadow will not darken your door
You will not hear my voice anymore
Author notes
I wrote this poem by drawing on the pain I felt after I had to get out of a relationship because, my love wasn't being returned. I didn't realise it for a long time because I was blind to what she was doing to me.
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Awesome
'My shadow will not darken your door
You will not hear my voice anymore.'
Very powerful lines. It honestly touched me.
Another fave line is:
'No more is the man that you once knew
With the strength to love only you.'
Just wow....took my breath away. Loved it to death. Good luck -
Powerful
Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned they say. No power is like that of a hurt, passionate human being. Poems like these made my career and had such a huge impact on me before I began to write. This piece is one of the best I've seen for a long time on this subject. It's serious Kevin, you have a talent that illuminates the world, you NEED to get your voice heard.
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magnificently deep and touchy
this is really very very beautiful. I can feel what you've felt at that time because your words tell a lot on your behalf. Great Job. -
The depth of your emotion screams out in this piece
Fantastic write
Peace
~M~
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good expression
You make your point very clear. Sometimes it is better to move on. You can't force a person to love you. -
I like this. It is very expressive.
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very nicely done
You did a good job expressing your feelings. At least you had the strength to leave with your dignity. Bonnie says it best. "I can't make you love me if you don't".
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