Baby not even superman could have saved my soul
&&// darling not even Never land is far enough away
From all the teary.tiny.tradgedies that creep into my life
Like unsuspecting surprises
(That were never really invited)
So baby lets play make believe.
&&// when my tears start
f
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l
l
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n
g
Faster than the rain
You’ll sweep me off my feet &&// take away my pain
Cause darling the clouds are clearing
And tonight my deepest.scars will turn to glitter.stars
That will smile and shine just for me & you.
But baby lets be honest, im no size.zero.beauty.queen
But blind blind baby you are that knight in shinning armor
Come rescue me baby
Save me from myself
&&// I promise ill never let go.
BANG-BANG baby I don’t wanna be a suicide attempt
cause I started writing a letter and it ended in goodbye
but the day you said hello I heard a BOOM-BOOM
the sound of my teen heart beating faster and faster
(darling your my super hero)
you saved me from myself.
Author notes
x.one last fix.x
A contest entry
- && all i want is... your best on the spot dirty pretty by over the rainbow--x.
525 points, ended May 10, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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added to finalists =]
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Ohh!! I love poems that have to do with superman and batman for some reason!!! I have even written one!!
"Like unsuspecting surprises"
I love this line, becasue it is cleverly redundant!
this was a really good poem,
the only problem I can see is that you used the word baby a tad to much, and the repetitiveness made the poem a little dull, try switching it up a little, like wiht Honey, Doll, Girl/boy, Sweety, you know anything of the sorts, just to give it some variety, but over all this was a really good write =P
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thanks for putting x. one last fix.x in your authors notes =] good luck in my contest =]
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'BANG-BANG baby I don’t wanna be a suicide attempt
cause I started writing a letter and it ended in goodbye
but the day you said hello I heard a BOOM-BOOM
the sound of my teen heart beating faster and faster
(darling your my super hero)
you saved me from myself.'
wow!! i love this!! specially those lines ^^^
but you need to have put a phrase in your authors notes which is missing in yours, could you please just read over the rules and change that and just reply or send a note saying you've done so, so i can just see that you've read the rules, thank you =]
great poem good luck in my contest =]
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