Knock me out and make me believe
Love is all I ever wanted
Mend my heart with kisses and lies
Ive slit my wrists to feel relief
Recount the fiction you flaunted
Knock me out and make me believe
Hold my hand, bring me to my knees
Feed me tales beyond my knowledge
Mend my heart with kisses and lies
Follow me down as I pleed
I feel my mind may be haunted
Knock me out and make me believe
Such beautiful heights we achieve
Released once again into the darkness
Mend my heart with kisses and lies
Throw me against the floor and leave
Your absence is all I will dread
Knock me out and make me believe
Mend my heart with kisses and lies
A contest entry
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kinda physically violent, but it's a really good poem. Very descriptive.
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An excellent write I thought this line was brilliant "Mend my heart with kisses and lies" good luck and good job!!!!!!!
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I really loved this. I could just feel all the emotion. it is very sad thank you for entering it into the contest.
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your refrain is terribly sad! it's an ugly thing to want to be lied to in order to feel better. i have felt that way before too. thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest :D
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Expresive write
Hold my hand, bring me to my knees
Feed me tales beyond my knowledge
Mend my heart with kisses and lies
Follow me down as I pleed
I feel my mind may be haunted
Knock me out and make me believe
Such beautiful write,LO-AMO SALUTE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
ahhhhhhh i luv this poem jus the way u wrote it the emotion ahhhh lol i like ur poem =]
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THANK You so much, so glad you liked it!!!
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