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Up in Smoke

so watch the words go up in smoke
as the poetry simply burns
who new such alittle thing
could make such a big thing
destroying everything
        proving nothings safe
it destroyed the broken girl you knew
because not even the spirts safe.
She fell in love
                he didn't
so friendship she gained
hoping it would turn to more
she fell deeper to dispear.
A thousand miles and still she loved
till a new guy came in
perfect was in every way
and surgery fixed what wasn't perfect
proving nothings safe
she fell in love
with they guy she'd liked
and you can guess what happened next
because she was the broken girl
who secretly was learning
to hate the whole world
and she's starting to rhyme now
you can tell she's going mad
because she really loves him
and it seemed he loved her to.
But crazy is as crazy does
as her words go up in smoke
destroying everything
        proving nothing has hope.

She's the broken girl
who fell in love
and found out she was wrong
settled for friendship
then thought she found real love
but she was only setting herself up
to take another fall.

I bet you were wrong when you looked at her
thinking she's all there
and sure you can talk to her
but is she really there?

so watch the words go up in smoke
as the poetry simply burns
who new such alittle thing
could make such a big thing
destroying everything
        proving nothings safe
it destroyed the broken girl you knew
because not even the spirts safe.
Those words in smoke
her voice 
        the only way she could scream
because slowly she lost everything
and now nothings at all the same.

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  • Delete this polease
    April 29, 2007

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    Well I must say Jason's going to kick your ass for burning poetry but I hope this is sign's your out of your block! I love you and am always here honey but talk to us...any of us before you no longer speak.


  • a Touch of Madness
    April 28, 2007

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    really good poem i like the way u reapeat the lines

    so watch the words go up in smoke
    as the poetry simply burns
    who new such alittle thing
    could make such a big thing
    destroying everything
    proving nothings safe

    luv this poem its full of emotion!!!keep on writting poems this good =]

  • OurxBeginning
    April 28, 2007

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    Wow..the emotion is very clear in this. I think you used the title very effectively. I also liked the words you used, flowed as one. nice job. ~ ~