Point blank:
A hollow inside of the reality to come.
What I want, and what I feel,
Are two different things.
Problematic -
My heart beats with this idol inspiration.
It's blank.
Nothing fills the gap thats flowing through my veins.
The kiss,
Of many tortured memories:
The glance,
Of the soulless remains of her:
A persecuted failure.
Open, the images gone.
What has she done?
This is her faulty:
Warm embraces take a long dream to hold -
Just opening the eyes of hell.
Why is she so took on the remembrance of him?
He gives the hope of God's last fighting angel,
The frail of the good man's judgment day:
Compression is only withered pain.
Tonight,
Everything remembered is vein.
The choice of...
Love's Slave.
Author notes
This is about an old love. Dwelling but getting over it. I suppose a new Love is in order? lol
All is pink.
Metaphorical. Think about love.
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I really love the choice of words in your poetry!!!
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hmmmm........well it's very heartfelt. it's also well wrote and touching. i love it!
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Thank you...
I truely appricate the fact you read it and liked it!
Tawni
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this is really touching and heartfilling... your a really good writer... keep u the good work
xxFreeSpiritedSoulxx
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AW!
Thank you! You're a sweet girl! I truely appricae your words!
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Awesome
I love this poem it rawness and flow are excellent deepness of feelings extraordinary and honesty great work tawny I love it -
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It's you! You're a missed on to my eyes, sweetie! It's been awhile!
Thank you for your kind words.
And I'm glad you love it!
Tawni
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This was very sad and I could feel the heartache in each word. Beautifully written sweetheart. I hope you can get over him soon. I know it's a lot easier said than done. If you ever want to talk about it or him. I'm here. I wish you the best. Ps. There was just a few typo's. Other than that. It was perfect.
Guin
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Lol, I know about the typos. I didn't check it till later! thank you though!
^.^
I'm glad that you liked it and thank you for being a support.
always, tawni
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lol, this is a wonderful poem you have here, i mean it was something that i liked to read. the subject and the words flowed to me, keep it flowing
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Thank you, sweetie!
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passionate
passionate, deep into theme, in sense also outstanding and I like the conception, rows flow is one on another with simple yet beautiful turnovers
thanks for sharing it
I love your poetry
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I'm glad you love my poetry. ^.^ I love yours as well. I adore you, sweetie. Lol.
tawni
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well this is quite an eye candy...metaphorically speaking.lol.wonderful write though and Lac247 is right keep your head up.something will get better somehow.and then you will have your mind taken off of the "rememberance of him".and who knows in doing something happy you will find true happiness.well heres a *hugs* to keep you going.and keep writing.
H.
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Too true, maybe I will forget the "rememberance of him" and move on with my life. I'm trying and I'll get there soon, I know it.
thank you.
Tawni
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Tawni... I am sorry. I really dont know what to say. I can feel your pain through your words and i am sorry. I just hope you know your not alone.
Someone once told me "Look towards the sky, weather may be bad now but the sun comes out sooner or later" Just think about it please.
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You are adorable! You care so much, Benny and i know you always will.
Tawni
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all is pink but on the inside it's really blurple and yes i do mean blurple
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*dwelling.*
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mmmm, you know i can't really think of what to say about this but this is something amazing, a golden read, keep it flowing
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