I want you
For breakfast, lunch and dinner
Let me feel you when your heart is in it
Overlap and indulge my desires
Burn the embers and stoke the fires
Carefree now, but make me love a plenty
Know my deepest thoughts..(if there are any)
Ask the questions others won't
Do me up right, or don't
Sense the need in me and respond in spades
Give me many, many accolades
Hold my hand when I walk through the fire
Grab a plane, take me up much higher
I'll need it
All that you can muster
Closer to me now
Must I show you how
That's not passion
Taking easy routes
Passion lives in hearts that's set to flame
Passion changes one, they can not stay the same
Passion is that inside display of tenacity
That I'll die trying attitude
The.."Let me jump higher, fly farther,do it harder
Super exceed, let me outsource the need
Leaping over every incumberance
Doggedly plying my way
Knowing that in spite of the pressure
I'm forging a brighter day
Turkeys for Thanksgiving
Tea for two
"I need passion...what about you"
Enthused to the point of exhaustion
Turned on to the inth degree
Hearing the call and responding
Forcebly, tenderly, directly, and perfectly
No passion?....
Then your moment has expired
A contest entry
- Give me your best poem. by keanes.
600 points, ended May 1, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - passion. by insecure princess.
600 points, ended May 20, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What a beautiful piece. It's great and you have much talent
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Thanks Lis-xo and welcome to the community lol hope you have great fun lol
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A good hungry opening. Passion is the adrenaline bursting through the heart as excitement fills the spirit with beautiful wonder. I agree with the ending here, yes, if there is no passion then you are not alive at all, nothing but a shell that moves and bleats.
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Hungry? hahahaha that's a unique way to say it hahhaa I like it lol Thank you, Kind Sir lol
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Brilliant and an awesomely written piece. Love it!
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Thanks so much for your comments here, I appreciate lol
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wow! i love this! its so diferent and beautiful. your words are impecable! great job
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Thanks bucketts
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great poem....very talented writer my favorite lines were Enthused to the point of exhaustion - fantastic really likeit! Great write!
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Thank you.
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I love this poem, it's going in to my favorites list. This is the kind of poem that blossems a little more with each reading, each thought. (And I know... I've read it three times now, each time more mind empowering) You've brought life to living in this inspiring piece. Pat (May I call you that?)
A deep, emotional and thoughtful poem
Dee
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Wow, such wonderful comments, this makes my day-thank you
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This is a lovely thought and poem I lke the concept and the flow of this
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a testament to passion......
I love the fluidic rhyme and rhythm in your work. Your poetry is always such a pleasure to read. I wish I weren't so preoccupied with school, or I'd read it more often. I wasn't sure if there is a typo in this line, or if it's just intentional.
Turned on to the inth degree
Knight70
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Very Nice
Well,gotten to two of your works so far and have enjoyed the journeys you've taken me on in both..will have to do some more looking here. Nicely done, umm..Patricia, Patty, lullaby, just what do you like to be called here ?
Evan
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Well Evan, my closest of friends all call me Pat...thanks so much for your input and comments, you are a jewel
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this is good, and well revised, but just isn't what i am look for right now... but well done on a fantastic poem!
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This was an wonderful poem. Keep up the great work.
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Ahh,the reader recognizes the fuel,the fire and the pinnacle of passion within this write,indeed without hunger we have no appetite and we need to be be fed to be nourished and to feed the appetite of a lover to nourish them,well done for being awarded the HM,I love the dignity within Honourable Mention.
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Thank you so much, you are so kind
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The.."Let me jump higher, fly farther,do it harder
Super exceed, let me outsource the need
Leaping over every incumberance
Doggedly plying my way
I see, I thought you were a kid, now I am convinced that you are not. Humm, this is a most and wonderful write. These lines I copied from your piece, I am curious, what they really mean to you. It sounds like an everlasting experience. I am glad you could mirror the past upon my white screen.
Keep up the great and thank you for sharing.
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They only mean that when you do something do it with enthusiasm, that's all. if you're going to half step, you might as well no step. Get it?
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a lovely piece here, this line brough a smile to my face and a chuckle Know my deepest thoughts..(if there are any)
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Ian, TY
Funny, but I see so much passion in you.am I wrong?lol
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excellent
once again you show you are quite handful. ahem
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Aahh
You sure know how to brighten a person's day...thanks.
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GREAT!!!
i love it, i love it, i love it!!
you have done an EXCELLENT job!!
thank you for entering my conest & good luck
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Thanks
It was my pleasure.
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woah
Wow - This is so beautiful - great write - Thanks for entering! -
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Thanks
Thank you for having me.
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well done...the 5th stanza is excellent....great rhythm and rhyme in this piece filled with passionate emotions...thanks
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Wow
Such a great response from you. Thanks so much.
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