Journey through a vast vale of silence.
A silence so hushed,
one can hear its rhythmic breathing.
A brilliant burst of light overhead, though it too is silent
illuminates a path.
All else remains in quiet darkness.
For those who choose to take this path,
a land so full of harmonious pleasure they shall find -
A land that will ensnare.
So be warned:
Once this path is followed, you can never go back.
Please tell me what you think
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As you know I like this a lot. Very well done.
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A brilliant burst of light overhead, though it too is silent
didn't understand that line.. the words blended to much and even disrupted the flow... consider changing... other then that you have a greatly phrased message and simple but complex idea... good job!
Thank-you for entering!
~Ryan~
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