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One life was broken, a million pieces lay scattered
Onward you went, for nothing much mattered
But basking in the glow, with your new-found friends
The pieces will be picked up, by someone else...again
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A contest entry
- Four AMAZING lines by Lj-.
335 points, ended May 6, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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'The pieces will be picked up, by someone else...again'....
sometimes and sometimes not....sometimes they weigth us down more....
But I/ we thank you for sharing this with us and of course me too again; as always...
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Aaaaaaaaaw Dangggggggg!!
This reminded me of that movie my brother watched..
The Last America Virgin...
Now not saying this applies to You
but the words spoken...brought forth those images
and the scene where the character sold his things
to help a girl out who went *back* into the arms of
the one who helped put her in her predicament.
I cried
Powerful piece!
Thank You for sharing this!!
Appreciate Your visit
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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A world of hurt is contained within these lines.
Very well done.
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Beautiful Words!!!
Well hello Eyes, Your words were very beautiful. You captured such great imagery in only four lines. Well done!!! A very uplifting and encouraging poem. We all get our hearts broken and it is our friends, new and old, that help us move past the heartache. Sometimes it is a very slow and painful process to move on. It is that way for me.Thanks for sharing.
Many smiles and blessings to you. You take care,
Sandy
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Just getting a feel of you through your writing....really liked this...so powerful in just four lines...smiles, Terry
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Very nice. I loved the rhyme and the thoughts.
Thank you for entering,
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You know me, the lover of short writes....this is splendid, tells me of wounds that are so deep..but always know what is broken can always be fixed...TY for expressing your honesty, and courage, albeit pain!
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Brilliant!
Yep. These are definitely AMAZING four lines! Talk about strength and living again! I truly loved this write. Especcially how the first line and the last line contrasted in so many ways and yet made up a poem so brilliantly beautiful. Jeez, I wish I had at least an ounce of the courage you have! Nice write! And best of luck in the contest!
Oh, and thank you so much for commenting on my piece! It meant so much to me!
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Courage, my dear, isn't being fearless...courage is moving forward THROUGH the fear. Perhaps even embracing it in a way. Being afraid doesn't make someone a coward at all. Knowing that you are afraid, then moving ahead anyway gives you strength. Anyone who claims that they are without fear is lying...we all have it. It how we deal with it that makes all the difference in the world. Thank you for the great comment
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"The pieces will be picked up, by someone else...again"...yes! the heart (and hope) lives on, against all odds...nice write!
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I love this, darlin'...I truly, truly love this!
It speaks of strength and determination and...rock on!
Wishing you all the very best of everything..
Sandy
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Thank you Sweetie
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