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Sanity

A case of hell, but not of fear
What I see has never been clear
Dead bells ringing, in my ear
Come a little closer, so you can hear

A contest entry

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  • A Murderous Lament
    May 4, 2007

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    Hmm

    Well four amazing lines perfectly describe it GOod luck in your contest!

    A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33


  • Lj-
    April 30, 2007

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    The mono-rhyme fits really nicely.
    I love the ending line, sort of creepy, to me.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.


  • PrincessOfFire
    April 28, 2007

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    Wow very powerful words. The reader is trapped and can hear the bells. Job well done. Thanks for sharing.
    Rose


  • La Luna Rosa
    April 28, 2007

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    Reminds me of a Christmas carol, without the flawless rhythm. Good concept, though, and expressed well with your limit of four lines.


  • silent bee
    April 28, 2007

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    short but love it! "Dead bells ringing, in my ear / Come a little closer, so you can hear "Those two lines ARE amazing! great little write and best of luck to you in your contest...i am sure you will do great!

    ~bee

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