he burnt my lips
{like fireflies}
on Summer’s hot cement
Author notes
10 words exactly
A contest entry
- half hour - 10 words by Lavender Butterfly.
380 points, ended April 28, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie by FallingTwilight.
320 points, ended May 27, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Mania 3 by Celticmoon.
800 points, ended May 27, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hmmm this was very intriguing....very intriguing indeed
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The problem with entering a poem so short, as this, in a contest that's so grand by points, and entries, is that it has to be just that well written to excel beyond all other entries. I do find it to be a good short poem but no more than that.
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This was awesome!
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A strange melding of images - violence, sexuality, night and day.
I like the dual reading of "he burnt my lips/like fireflies" or "like fireflies on summer's hot cement".
Well Done,
K. F.
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What a brilliant write!!
I was captivated by the soft wording and imagery,
This is so welll done,
-Brenden
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whoa, I really love this one the imagery you've managed to capture in just ten words is truly stunning
congratulations with the gold cup
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Really lovely- definately the right choice for the gold...............................nice work!
Beautiful imagery.
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Mmmm, beautifully abstract. The images are wild and deep, but manage to leave most of the interpreation up to the reader. Love it!
Luck for the contest.
DancingRed.
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So creative and vivid with immense imagery. thanks for sharing... x Love and light, Butterfly.
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