I am Fire
I will scream at any moment
consume you in passion
engulf you with fury
destroy you with words
and make way for new understanding.
I am Water
my words will flow to you
on a stream of endless undulating
eloquence.
Yet so easily polluted
my misinterpretation
and muddied by a lack of understanding.
I am Earth
I'll budge for no man
nor woman no matter
how beautiful or fugly.
I'm coarse
I'll beat the crap out of you
and swallow you up into oblivion.
Be you person or beast,
Cross me not, but nurture.
I am Metal
I am Aether
of a Aristotelian sense.
I am love
I am freedom
I am hope
I am chance and fortune
I am all
I am nothing
I am number
I am thought
I am feeling
I am logic
I am passion
I am stoicism
I'll remain so
be you person or beast,
Cross me not, but nurture
the multifaceted creation
a miracle hath wrought.
I am life
I am death
I am action
I am apathy
I am song
I am silence
Either way,
it matters not.
I am what I am
I'll change for nothing.
I am what I am
accept it
or lose yourself
in the beauty of language
and never appear in my vocabulary.
Author notes
"Tell Wind and Fire where to stop but don't tell me."
Chuck Dickens
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A little lengthy and a little over repetitive, but a creative way of writing about the quote by Chuck Dickens. I can tell you put a lot of work into it and I liked what I am reading. Thanks for sharing and keep up the great writing!
--Tim -
Oooh quite unique in using the quote. Didn't expect it, not saying it's wrong..just didn't expect it.
There are some things I want to mention though..do you have to have fugly? I mean..for me it kind of took away the serious attitude. I don't think it has to be there, to me it would sound much better with just ugly. And other thing..When you start writing I am number, I am thought..I mean..I understand where you're going and why you put it. I just didn't think it at least had to be spaced like that. Of course, it's your writing not mine..soo it probably wouldn't be the same if you took that advice.
Other than that I really enjoyed it. I thought it was...very mature, very meaningful and full of emotion. I could feel your personality..even though I don't know you. I liked it.
**** CHARLES DICKENS ******* -
PSST! You need the quoter's name
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You had me really captivated with the beging of this poem! It had great flow, and great vocabulary choice, buit then you kinda lost me at this part
"I'll budge for no man
nor woman no matter
how beautiful or fugly.
I'm coarse
I'll beat the crap out of you
and swallow you up into oblivion"
Words like fugly and crap really hold no poetic meaning for me, But If you like them thats awesome!
The rest of the poem was a little choppy, I think you had too many I am's in one part, but there was great meaning and depth!. this was a good write, good luck int he contest!
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