Like the eternal mother
I have been robbed!
Not you, my daughter
but your soft child-light
gone missing.
And as I search my myth
for answers, for direction
the earth grows old
and cracks beneath the weight
of my grief.
And how I misread the story!
Preparing frantically, obsessively
for the hand of Hades
I blinded myself to the power
of Aphrodite.
Disguised in promiscuous-white
riding ashore on hormonal waves
rising...falling...rising
cresting, finally, above you
she stopped atop the impending crash
to contemplate the victory.
Then, as one,the wave and she
swept you deep into the mystery
drowning your innocence
in an ocean of perfume
and foamy white puffs of mousse.
Author notes
This poem intertwines two myths. Persephone, the daughter of Demeter was stolen by Hades to become the queen of the underworld. Demeter was extremely upset and as long as she mourned the earth suffered in perpetual winter. A deal was struck and Persephone was returned to her mother for half of the year (thus we have spring and summer). The other myth is that of the birth of Aphrodite. It is said that her father's blood mixed with the foam of the ocean to create the sexy being we think of today and she was born ashore on the waves. This poem is dedicated to my dauighter Jennifer .
A contest entry
- PIF: Gods and Goddesses by SerenityNChains.
575 points, ended November 19, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A fantastic freeverse depiction of one of my favorite myths! You did well here, telling of demeters sorrow and loss. I applaud thee, best of luck.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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Wow, what a great job you did with this. I haven't had the pleasure of getting Aphrodite to write about, but hopefully, I will soon. I never thought to do something like this, good luck to you!!
Jin -
I enjoy these myths
which have so much scope for use in poetry. Especially liked the idea of Demeter searching for her myth, for answers to what happened. Very well written and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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this is the best poem i have read today, i love howw you allude to mythology to paint a more vivid picture, the figurative language added to the whole effect magnificently, i really enjoyed every line of this
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Thank you very much. This poem was by far the most fun to create and it is my favorite up to this point...
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Well, I love mythology, but unfortunately I do not know which myth is this, or what experience, coz it was not quite clear.
But over all, I enjoyed reading it.
So, Keep on writing,
Nooni -
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Okay it can be a little tricky. The first stanza and the refernece to Hades all are parts of the myth of Demeter and Persephone. The last stanza is more a description of the things we would associate with Aphrodite in relation to my daughter and her loss of innocence. Thank you for taking the time to comment and for being honest and helpful!!!
Is everything a little more clear now or do you feel I need to revise?
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