so this is why
they say stay single child
this is why
i seem like the wild child
i dont know
where these ideas come from
i dont know
if i can be the one
but im not in the mood for debate
id rather not have to wait
but there's no luck in beating fate
cause the path goes where it leads
and we all have our needs
so this is why
you are gonna walk away
this is why
so very few really stay
this is why
i take advice and wait
this is where
i put my trust in fate
cause the path goes where it leads
and we all have our needs
Please tell me what you think
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I like it!
This is a really strange poem. The emotions all seem very... shrouded in mystery. Not dulled, but hidden.
I must say that, just personally, I think a poem looks a little more finished and it's easier to read if you do basic editing.... capitalizing "I" and saying "going to" rather than "gonna". The rhyming was good--basic, but not awkward the way a lot of rhymes are. Good job! You're a really good writer. -
agrere with allfaith on this 1. Man, is this ever the most lovely poetry I've ever read on this site! You are a very natural kind of writer!!! I can really tell with your thoughts with this one!!!
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Great poem
Man that is a very good poem. this poem is 110% true
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Thats very very very very true (sorry for so many very's)
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