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If only I paid the toll

My heart beats as fast as the rhythm of sound
Of all the things that pass around
I lie beside you and caress your beheaded soul
Your last words were… if only I paid the toll

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  • Celtess
    June 14, 2007

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    The rhyth and rhyme are very effective. The last bit makes sense of the poem and brings it together in a nice neat ending. A little sad but very interesting read. Thanks for sharing xox


  • Lj-
    April 29, 2007

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    This is really cool. I like the rhyme a lot.
    Very interesting.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.