We stapled hands onto toothpick crosses, picking up pieces of ourselves.
Mocking the birds & kissing boys from the public school.
Though we understood, to lie to each other,
would be worse than our already convicted sins.
Author notes
Inspired partailly by my private school
days and my best friend
but can mean many things.
Comment/critic me!
peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- Four AMAZING lines by Lj-.
335 points, ended May 6, 2007, 32 entries
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jeeze i kinda wish i had gone to st. mary's...hahahah welllll not really actually but my mom WAS considering tking me there when i was just starting school (she had gone there)but she decided she wanted me to go the a bigger school i guess....lol BUT i love the poem, it's my kinda poem, short sweet and to the point..(in various ways...) good job with it!!
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Thanks darling,
I wonder what it would've been
like having you with us
at St.Mary's!
peace to all ~flight
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This is a really cool subject. I can definitely relate to the whole Catholic school thing.
In your last two lines,
I think it would look better if you broke it up like this:
Though we understood, to lie to each other,
Would be worse than our already convicted sins.
Thank you for your entry,
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Thanks for the comment
& helpful idea!
peace tp all ~flight -
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No problem
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Tres interesting. I loved the statement you so strongly portrayed in only a few lines // words. Excellent.
~Ryan~
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Thanks.
peace to all ~flight
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