There she was,
lying in a bed far from home and,
more importantly,
far from him.
Her heart had been ripped apart
and sewn back together
and drop-kicked
into the thorny bushes that grew by the stream.
She had loved and lost
and loved again
before him.
He had stolen her heart
and left her empty.
Through time,
she managed to grow a new one.
In a storm of emotion
he came rushing back into her mind
and into her new heart.
The only evidence of the tempest within her
was a single tear
that hit her latest lover's pillow
and soaked into the down
unnoticed.
Author notes
Macabre Miss
I liked the title.
A contest entry
- Twenty Titles, Twenty Entries. by shirk.
550 points, ended April 27, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I adore poetry that tells a story,
and you've done just this. Well
written, you've allowed the reader
to visualize the narrator's emotions.
Love, Lane
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hmmmm...the girl needs to get up, and get ready to show her full blown tempest, kick that lying bastard in the junk and get on with her life...heh heh!
I liked this though, because I think most people can identify with the agony this poor girl is going through.
As an old lady now, I want to shake her and tell her to move on...life is short... but the young girl that I was sympathizes.
Great write! Write on, poet.
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that hit her latest lover's pillow
and soaked into the down
unnoticed
Indeed very touching and very intriguing work is here..this is the sentimentl truth of the life revealing the story of the heart time and time again.....I agree with every word of yours here in
this every line you revealed here with so much universally dipped statements and I adore all such declarations of yours ... a great deep work is here..
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Wonderful vision from your words
creative writing that left me with a vision of a lonely girl bound to finding love,. thank you for sharing
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Simply amazing. I love the story this poem weaves, plus your imagery had me captivated. Best of luck to you in the contest!
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