Push yourself through boundaries
Into the reaches beyond
Don't wait for that sudden spark
Patience will be long gone
Fire up the boosters
And let them go with a roar
Twist the key in your hand
And open up those doors
Success does not come easily
And those who i admire
Had the faith and determination
'to set themselves on fire'
Unlock your heart to possibilities
Throw back the shadows of doubt
Cast off the fears that held you
Release them with a shout
Propel yourself forward
Light the fuse with your flame
Ready set, don't look back
Success, after FIRE! and Aim.
Author notes
6. "Success is not the result of spontaneous combustion. You must set yourself on fire." - Reggie Leach
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well done! thanks for sharing
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I always appreciate poems with a good rhyme scheme and a good message which your poem has both. Thanks for entering
--Tim -
I believe that if you were to separate this into sections, you'll get a better impact towards your reading audience. Also, I'd like to point out that if you was to add a word in the first four lines of this piece, it would not sound so 'awkward'
In other words, like this:
Push yourself through boundaries
Into the reaches beyond
Don't wait for that sudden spark
otherwise, patience will be long gone
With the lack of puctuation to really define the beginning or end, the reader in a way has to struggle with the understanding of the concept you're providing.
Thank you for entering and keep penning
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you did a great job with the rhyme in this one, most rhyme poems are sticky, but this was one of the best Ive read, it flowed so smoothly!!! your enterpertation of the quote was a little blan though, well for me, someone else may love it =] this was a really good write keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest!
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Whoa. The verdicts are precise. Amazing and Great. I think this is fabulous. It really speaks to me and it explained the quote beautifully. You used great words and it really hit me.
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Great
I simply love this piece of work..... it is my type of poetry... so dynamic.. so forceful... so electrifying..
so energy filled.. so spontaneous.... so full of life...
sound fantastic when read aloud with an exciting voice...
I enjoyed this read very much.... -
AMAZING
WOW hun this is amazing, this is true on sooo many levels aswell well done. You really have outdone yourself again. I wish you the best of luck in the contest not that you ever need it hehe. Also doremember if you do need anyone to talk to i am here.
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