teeter totter
going up
teeter totter
going down
up and down
down and up
never ending
rhythmic dream
bouncing up
falling down
oh look theres the ground!
Author notes
William Gray
A contest entry
- Prompts in the Round, Round 1 (Open to all) by Lady-Pegasus.
600 points, ended June 1, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow that was awesome and short. i personly like the short ones best. i do like it when people write long but it is also nice to read short and to the point like this. this is the best poem i have read 2night. well keep up the good work and make sure to keep up all your writing you really are talented.
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Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. hehe this is cute, and one that i can recall from childhood, well not the write, the event I mean, lol. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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Very easy to read the words you write in these few short lines. Poets can write poems about any subject, even teeter totters. LOL
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I must admit, i had a hard time following this, i think thats just because im slow and stooopid though. Nice write
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I was never a fan of teeter totters as a child but I did like this poetic rendering. Good luck in this contest.
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LOL Cute, but VERY hard to read. Font too light for this background.. It hurts the eyes and I must highlight everything to see it!
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thank you for the comment, i changed the font!
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hmmm... interesting i have never read a poem about a teeter totter.. godd write though....
*Denika
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