Anything is just the same
as it was the other day.
I took a bow, but no one clapped,
even as I stepped offstage,
thinking ill thoughts of my audience.
Only when the lights turned on,
I realized no one was there.
I curled up in the other room
as he yelled at me once again
for something I didn't even do.
I told him that, and he got madder.
"Who else could do something like that?
I saw you, I know it was you!"
He had no idea what he was saying,
of course.
Looking out the window,
I saw a boy walking through the field.
He stopped and looked around,
then fell to his knees.
We drove away before he rose,
but my face was pressed against the window
many minutes after he was gone.
The pencil I am writing with,
I broke it in frustration across my knee.
One second later, I taped it back together,
and I said,
"Pencil, you and I are much alike,"
and I sat down to write this poem.
Author notes
One of my more random pieces that I wrote on the bus a while ago... To me it sort of has a deeper more personal meaning... Well think of it what you will, just leave a comment.
Please tell me what you think
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Interesting narrative poem. I felt this one was somewhat sad. This was quite a deep poem, I liked the line about the pencil best although it seemed to suggest that the narrator is somewhat broken.
Pozo
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BANDITS UNITED!
This is such an unusual poem to read, so different to most poems I get to read, very creative with many layers to it and mystery and intrigue...
Like the other commentors have said, it reminded me of looking at random photographs, or snippets of memory...I like it a lot, I feel I want to ask many questions about each piece of imagery, in fact each piece could be written as poem itself...
Extremely engaging, inspiring and an extra ordinary read, I wish I could give you more than 3 claps
Love and smiles...
~Lilac
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This is really interesting...I liked the random-seeming images you present, sort of like pictures taken with a camera from all over the place. It is a bit hard to make the connection between all of it, but I still enjoyed it a lot. The idea that tape "fixes" everything I can partly agree with, since tape is at best only a temporary fix, and at worst just covers up the broken parts for a while. It's good this has a personal meaning to you though. Other people will all take their own meaning from it, and I think that is often a good thing.
Best wishes,
~J.
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Wow... That was different... but in a fantastic way!
I don't really know what, but there is something special about this piece...
Keep up the excellent work!
Annie
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uggh, i just wrote a comment for this, but it got delted, so im writing again, ok well i thouhgt that I have read EVERY one of your poems, but this one i must have missed, and im sad about that, cuase this one is really good. and im trying to figure out the personal meaning, but ehh my mind is drawing blanks. but you did an amazing job (like always) and i really enjoyed this piece.
God Bless, I love you! and Talk to you soon
XOXO
Kara
P.S. BANDITS UNITED!!!!!!!!!!
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Well I only posted it a few days ago... And actually you haven't commented on all of them (on here, anyway, since I only put half of my poems on AP...), since you joined about 2 months after I did or something like that... XD But thanks!
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Looking out the window,
I saw a boy walking through the field.
He stopped and looked around,
then fell to his knees.
We drove away before he rose,
but my face was pressed against the window
many minutes after he was gone.
I really like the images you painted a picture with words. The reader feels like they are seeing it with you.
Radom muse apprears in all of us. I even understood you're frusstrattion. I was wondering how you had tape to tape it up. Not all of us carry tape. I carry extra pens and penicls with me. Very well done
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I don't know if I agree that tape fixes everything but I think it fixes some of the little things. Maybe I'm just too shallow to get this. Who knows! lol, jk
Really enjoyed the flow here, though I didn't quite get it all, but for some reason I felt like not getting it was still okay because this poem means something to you!
~M~
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BANDITS UNITED !! *grin*
Interesting piece, sometimes the most random things occur and our musr snaps them up to create unique writes that do indeed mean much to us! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e * 
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Wow what images You have brought forth in this verse!
What a story You have weaved for us to inhale~
Love random pieces~ they have unique meaning and
dwelve deep!!
Thank You for sharing this!
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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As I read, I felt like you were recalling a dream. In dreams everything that happens is random, but they all tie together somehow. The feelings of loneliness and isolation are present in all of them. A powerful write, even if the images are random. >pixxie<
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Bandits Unite!
Yeah the piece is random, but I understand it very well. I think it's one of those types of poems that you either understand it as it relates to you, or you don't. I relate to this very well. Broken, just like the pencil. I thought this write was really creative, abstract and clever. I really enjoyed reading this - it's much different from what I usually read on this site and what is put on this site so well done on being unique.
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I read this as a day dream which I do so often, the words flow with ease, the imagery is clear, anger and frustration of everyday life well written great job on this write I enjoyed this read....
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Quite profound thinking here, with great use of metaphor thrown in. The end of this piece links in very cleverly with the title ~ which had me wondering at the beginning! Very intriguing writing here ~ I very much enjoyed following along on your journey and seeing your images in my mind's eye.
Very, very good writing, dear poet!
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Awww, I love this off the top piece. Yep, tape fixes a lot of things, can mend most anything, especially if it means fixing that pencil to write, which can mend most everything else.
A pretty cool write
I like it a lot
Dee
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This is adorable! i just love how you have moved around to different sceneros. Great flow & tone! It reflects kind of detached emotional responses. I love this piece!!!
Love & light
Debbera
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BANDITS UNITED. THe 29th is your day - enjoy being in the spotlight. Liked the metaphor in these lines - tape can mend so many things, but I do not think a broke heart.
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BaNdiTS UniTEd
I love random poems and you have written a fine one... makes me want to try! I have never written a random poem... 
You are inspiring!
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A very nice introspective piece. I liked the concept of the tape mending all. Great write, keep your pen forever flowing. Bunny
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