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Loving You is Killing Me

Loving you
Is killing me.
But there ain't no other place I'd rather be.
I would die
For you, you see.
Loving you
Is killing me.

Girl, my heart is hurtin'
My head is spinning too.
And I know this for certain
I've fallen hard for you.
But when we are together
You seem to look through me.
My heart is yours forever
But I wonder what you see.

Loving you
Is killing me.
But there ain't no other place I'd rather be.
I would die
For you, you see.
Loving you
Is killing me.

So many times I've wondered
Just what I mean to you.
Have I stumbled? Have I blundered
By saying what is true?
My love for you is undying
Forever it will grow.
But, babe, if you've been lying
I really want to know.

Loving you
Is killing me.
But there ain't no place other I'd rather be.
I would die
For you, you see.
Loving you
Is killing me.

Girl, I know how I am feeling
But I'm not sure of you.
My head and heart are reeling,
I'm just not sure what I should do.
Babe, if you could let me know
Just where I stand with you.
Then I could keep on living
And go on doing what I do.

Loving you
Is killing me.
But there ain't no other place I'd rather be.
I would die
For you, you see.
Loving you
Is killing me.

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    Thank you for this interesting poem in our contest, it read more like song lyrics than a poem, with a repetitive chorus, but we both enjoyed the read.

    All the best Sue and Jeff


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    June 29, 2008
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    I like this with its flowing rhythm...

    couple of typos...there is an 'is' without the 's'[v 3] and consider 'spinning too'

    I really enjoyed this poem. It has a sad note and, at the same time, a humorous lilt to it, with the repeated vocabulary. It is a light-hearted poem which makes me wonder if you are happy or sad.

    Food for thought in this paradox and that makes a good poem.


  • GypsyEyes
    May 31, 2008

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    oh this was pretty! i like fell in love with this one! great job! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox


  • HereComesTheSun
    May 18, 2008
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    a very true write full of emotion and such great job


  • Topaze gold member
    May 12, 2008
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    Very nice piece and well written, my best wishes in the contest.


  • BlackSwan
    May 12, 2008

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    Well the rhyming in this poem is exquisite.
    ::Also... ^-^ you and i share a similar writing style, when it comes to repeating stanzas. I really like that because it really emphasizes the main idea of the piece.

    To be quite honest with you, I feel as if this poem is speaking to me. The contest is about how there was a love between a boy and me, but it just wasn't meant. Your words seem as though they are coming right from that boy.
    Crazy as it seems, I've heard these words before.

    Amazing write, I feel close to tears as I reminisce.

    -Thank you for your entry, Angi Terese


  • daviscth silver member
    March 5, 2008
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    Wonderful job!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    Thank you for your heartfelt entry, I have been in this place before, but am so happy I've moved on, good luck, Josie


  • TheDemonEve
    May 30, 2007

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    Wow. This is a superb poem. It inspires the emotion of a mystery in love, portrays it flawlessly.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • Angel of Musik
    May 29, 2007

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    Awwww...

    That's really....idk, I can't find the word. Lovely?

    I also find it very relate able.

    This is wonderful, thanks for entering.

  • karabi
    May 29, 2007
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    Very good

    It's more a song than a poem. When reading it you feel like singing.


  • Ryno
    May 10, 2007
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    Interesting but very cliché. Thank-you for your entry anyhow, I did enjoy reading it ~~
    ~Ryan~


  • Amber Lee
    April 29, 2007
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    Oh this is a beautiful poem,good luck with the contest!


  • Laura
    April 28, 2007
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    this is amazing i love your rep well done and good luck in the contest xx
    laura xxxxx


  • second-born
    April 28, 2007

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    wow! your song has a nice chorus and very fluid verses! i can imagine listening to it with a guitar as its only accompanient!!! goodluck to you!!!


  • Maybe Anastasia
    April 27, 2007
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    very nice. It has a nice beat to it. I love the repeat. This is great thanks for the entry!

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