Sweet daughter you are my life
Your smiles brighten my day
In my loneliness you take away my gloom
as your loving nature enters the room
Your pain must be as bad as mine
you lost your sister and father in such a short time
But we try to be strong for each other
You know what its like to be a mother
And in turn i have your little ones to hold
The love of a child keeps out the cold
The cold sad heart that cant go on
But for the love of god and our special bond
Through our sorrow we will be strong
when i look at you i see me and i pray that your life much better will be
You are so young and have a beautiful soul
I pray that you will be like that when you grow old
You are my treasure my diamonds and pearls and you are my loving beautiful baby girl.
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this is wonderful. it's touching and real. thank you for entering and best of luck
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This would be better if all the couplets rhymed, but it's really pretty anyway.
Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
Katie -
This is so sad, and lovely at the same time. I cannot imagine losing my husband and child at the same time. It is good to see you have a support system through your child and grandchildren. This is a very deep and touching write. Love and light yoour way and best of luck in the contest.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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This one made me think of the days in which I might be a father. Good luck in the finals.
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The Pain of Death
WOW You could feel the pain in this and the feeling of moving on with your life.....
I really don't know who this was wrote for but i know that the mother is very passionate about her daughter and what she is going through....
The Pain that one has to go through when there is a death in the family is the worst pain.....
I can never say how much it does hurt to lose somebody close to you the feeling as if being alone or that noody can help you....
Great Write...
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i love this
a connection between a mother and a daughter
made me sad because not all relationships can be like this
but what you have is perfect with your daughter
a wonderful poem well written
and extremly heartfelt well done
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It was sweet to too God-ish for me.
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem~ Keep up the good work~ Good luck to you in the contest!
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Your a Finalist!!!
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i really loved
This!! Good luck in the Contest!!!
8rose*
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this is an amazing poem. its so meaningful. i love it.
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Thank you for your lovely entry, Josephine
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that is so so sweet!!!!! You write very wel
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I absolutley love it. I teared up as I read this beautiful piece. It was very touching. Keep that pen flowing.
Guin
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Your style and rhyme scheme are inconsistant and you broke the rhythm with the 14th line. I love the subject though and can see, with a little more work, this poem being great! Thank you for entering my contest.
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i love this cuz ur talking about either ur daughter or it's about urself and it's very nice!
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This piece was so full of pain and strength,I can't imagine what it must have been like to lose a daughter and husband,I can't imagine,but I am glad that you had each other and you could get through,I know you will never forget but you will always have each other and that kind of bond can't be broken,this piece really touched me,it was absolutely beautiful
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thank you for the comment :]
this is so beautiful and full of emotion.
you should be proud of this write, it's truly lovely! -
VERY NICE......you have a lot of talent.Keep up the good work.
~Tia~
GOD BLESS
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most beautiful!!!
wounderful! you put this one together so well. i love the words you use, and the feeling you put in to it! God bless you and your family! -
you lost you sister small typo there love, orhh this is heart wrenching its so deep with emotions well done its is utterly beautiful and a poem an poet would be proud of xx
laura xxx
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