I sit in the dark,
alone in my room.
stereo blazes.
this is my tomb.
Then it comes over me.
i'm breathing.
i'm screaming.
i'm bleeding.
I can't explain it.
the rage overtakes me.
everything in my way gets hit.
a darkness i cannot see.
I hate you all.
i want to kill you.
i will make you fall.
i will kill you.
Then the anger is gone.
and i write my story.
awake until early dawn.
then i start over again.
I am so alone.
i love it so.
it caused my rage.
now it will show.
You all are
beating me down.
my rage is my fuel now.
in hate i drown.
Then i feel so numb.
it feels so good.
anger returns.
i do what i should.
My rage overcomes,
and can't break free.
the worst part is
i love it.
Author notes
rage on!
Written July 21st, 2003
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this would be a good song just add a chorus! i liked how this flowed.
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Very awesome poem!!
I like how strong the voice was, and the tone was constent!!!
I really liked where you wrote:
"Isit in the dark,
alone in my room.
stereo blazes.
this is my tomb."
Way cool, keep it up! -
This is an excellent write. It's extremely well written, and I loved the twist it had. The flow is very good. I can't think of anything else to say. It was a great write, thanks for sharing.
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kick ass!!
Wow! this is a great poem! i can feel the rage!! its kick ass! i have this same kind of rage allll the time! but i love it, so its all good!!
Keep up the great work!!!
BruisedAndBroken -
hell yeah!
Hmm... this reminds me of time when I get cynical. I think you could put this to a good tune and have a kickass song. Something low and throbbing perhaps? -
o0o hey sexy, rage is kickin I really like this poem, and I can actully relate to it.... I really enjoyed reading it, sorry I didnt get to it last nite for you.
Jen -
Very good Brandon. Is this true?
-Matt- -
LOL, Maybe some of those fumes are causing this...j/k! I feel like this myself sometimes, like you want to break out and hurt everything and everyone. it's like an exciting adrenaline rush, but uncontrollable and aimed at something. Good write.
Sam -
LOL, Maybe some of those fumes are causing this...j/k! I feel like this myself sometimes, like you want to break out and hurt everything and everyone. it's like an exciting adrenaline rush, but uncontrollable and aimed at something. Good write.
Sam
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