Before a silent audience,
your hand upon my arm,
I stand. The manic transience
of fear, belied by calm,
Is fluttering beneath my cape,
and will no longer hide
When they, at last, have leave to gape
at that which waits inside.
Your ritualistic spell is cast,
the fiery circle made
By necromancy three days past
has turned my flesh to shade.
When I let fall my velvet dress
upon the open stage,
They’ll see my shameless nakedness
– but marvel at the mage.
O Sorcerer! Love-torrents tore
(how could a girl resist?)
Relentlessly, swept all before
when, simply, I was kissed…
Author notes
(There is no need to remind me I said I would stop posting poems!)
In a list
A contest entry
- Love and the Magician (pic inspired) Quick contest to be judged in 24 hours by XxGoldenxXDawnxX.
480 points, ended April 27, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was very deserving of gold! I was expecting something else, as I know the term brujo, and am one. However, was quite pleased to see a well written romantic poem instead! Very elegant write, and the ass on that girl in the movie was to die for. All in all a great experience so I give it...
Three bunnies...
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I'll check out the movie and check out her ass. Thanks for the heads up.
(note the above feed line)
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Estimada Senora Mairi
Quiero, con estas escasas palabras, pedirte perdon lo acontecido ya hace mucho tiempo.
Una vez creia que yo era mas y no lo era yo. Te debo una apologia y entiendo si prefieres no aceptarla ahorita. A cada cual su merecido, no es asi?
No se mucho de sus obras, pero con lo poco que lei', se a ciencia cierta que eres mujer de categoria.
Ojala que esta experiencia me ha ensenado algo util.
Que Dios te bendiga.
Me quedo corto.
Atentivamente,
John-Las Vegas, Nevada USA
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Lo siento, John... no hablo Castellano
M
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Beautiful ...
Beautifully written and concived as usual. At least i wont have a problem dropping mine on the stage cause I wear braces ..
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Bazza, mate - did I really need to know what you wear under your coat?
Hey, I am glad you liked this one. Honestly, though, I dashed it off between bites of my lunchtime sandwich.
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wonderful, Mairi! The mage is all the rage. I should think you could conjure up something amazing for my May Day contest, what with all that Scottish lore behind you. (I don't clap anymore/don't be sad.)
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Och no tae worry aboot the applause! The opinion of a fine poet is worth all the points on AP! Thank you, ea.
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i see why you took gold this is a golden poem, i liked it, you did a great job on it, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest
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Thanks, DP.
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Hi Mairi! I am so happy that you do sneak in a poem once in a while, this is beautiful...
O Sorcerer! Love-torrents tore
(how could a girl resist?)
Relentlessly, swept all before
when, simply, I was kissed…
Congratulations on the gold, it is always a pleasure to read your poetry, this is an excellent poem
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Well I am glad you liked it. Thank you very much.
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Well Done!
Dear Mairi,
What's this you're not posting poems - you must need a good secretary.
How dare you hide your talent - and besides we need excellent competition out here!
Your barm pot,
Tangle
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Hi Tangle, you utter barm pot. This last thing I want to do is hide it . Check out my author page for the reasons behind my exile. Oh yes, by the way, I'll give you all the url of my web-site when it is up and running.
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Wonderful
This is just fantastic and I love the way you indent each second line. I love it so much. Its got a lot of mood and imagery and feeling all through it. My favourite lines in particular are these
I stand. The manic transience
of fear, belied by calm,
Is fluttering beneath my cape,
and will no longer hide
They just evoke beautiful imagery and feeling.
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Thank you for the comments, and the gold award.
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Finally I find you back on here it's been
a long winter without you... and then you bring
us such a treasure... Finally the sun can shine
Mairi is back in rhyme. At least for today anyway.
laurie.
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Hi Laurie. Well if you read my author page you will find that I have actually said I won't be posting anything here for the foreseeable future. Then what do I go and do? Yep - I enter two contests within a couple of days of each other, and make a liar out of myself! I am very glad you liked this one anyhow. I wrote it at work, earlier today... oh and the sun is shining beautifully here in Scotland.
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Don't be too hard on yourself
it's just that old
AP addiction... it's like a
on your back and
the only way to get that annoying chimp off is to
come and play with us. lapoe.
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Are you telling me I have a chimp on my shoulder?
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Yep!! I'm afraid so... you're just like the rest of us...
a bunch of hunched backed AP posters. But the
good news is you can get special dispensation from the
government for this rare affliction. lapoe.
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HAHAHAHAHA
Hon, once a poet, always a poet! There is no stopping a writer and a poet from feeling and putting down on pages their need of expression.
BTW, this is a fantastic poem and I love what you have done with the pic. Excellent and perfect for the contest
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Hello Sylvyr - long time since we exchanged notes on anything. I'm not often on the site these days. Thanks for your kind comments.
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Exceptional
You've got my vote hands-down on this impeccable jewel. Quite the spell you've woven here, mairi. Truly tremendous. Best of luck in the contest- not that you'll need it however. It really great to read your poems again, and don't stop posting please.
All the best,
David Michaels
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Well, David, I might dash the occasional one off for a friend here, but I had to make a decision which way my writing career was going to go. I am glad you like this one.
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mairi bheag
Well, whatever you direction you decide to take your writing career, mairi, I'm sure you'll have tremendous success. I don't need to tell you that you are by far the most, if not the most, exquistely talented writers on this site. Your poetry has a very mature and serious quality that is not easy to attain..
All the best,
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David, sincere thanks for the compliment.
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OH! I am struck with awe!
How splendid! I admire this exceptional poem, line on line and smiled with pleasure as I enjoyed your elegant talent. 
The topic is enchanting the scene in your poem is spellbinding!
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{chuckling} Oh Melodies... you bring the sun out sometimes.
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