To fade away in the forgotten memories.
To disappear in the shadows .
To be in a crowded room yet feel all alone.
To have a voice, yet only silent words are spoken.
I long to escape to the light and end this loneliness.
A contest entry
- 5 Lines only. by Naridill.
300 points, ended May 2, 2007, 30 entries
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invisible is the perfect word here
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this is so powerful and i love that i can relate to this piece. i have felt this way before and still do sometimes today. its sad. you have taken these emotions and condensed them into something that although is short, due to contest length, it speaks so many more words to the reader! and excellet write, and best of luck to you!
~bee -
This is a rather short poem, but you have definately managed to put a whole lot of emotions within each word you used to create this poem with.
These are also feelings that a lot of people will be able to relate to in some way. I'm pretty sure of that. And the ones, for who these feelings belong to the past, will know that even though it all looks so dark for you, things will get better eventually... well written
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GREAT!!!!!!
I loved your take on this. This was An AWESOME poem and I cant wait to read more of your works if they are as good as this one. I can relate to this poem because there are times when I have felt left out, and alone...very awesomely done..and best of luck to you in the contest.
~Raymond~ -
Nice write, very touching with beauty, darkness and uniqueness in its own way. I like the imagery shown.
Well done & thank you alot for your entry.
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Awesome write,very dark and beautiful!
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I love contrast.. good work
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